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Kristie Sue meets Iambe
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Kristie Sue meets Iambe |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
My car broke down Leaving me yesterday With thoughts of how To get around And pay for the fix. I thought about talking To Iambe I’ve heard she did good work And would make the pain In my wallet easy to endure. I grabbed a bottle of Scary Smooth And bummed a friends truck Then headed down to talk to her. She was there Bent over some old Ford Doing Lord knows what To the guts of it When I stopped she looked up With eyes to melt a man And to make a woman covet Their easy hardness. She and I chatted a bit Me telling her all I knew (that the car didn’t work) When I pulled the bottle Of Scary Smooth out She grinned and asked me If I’d like to go inside Maybe have one with her While she arranged to Get someone to tow my car. I agreed Just before dawn I woke up My mouth tasting like Someone had used it for a landfill Iambe wasn’t there And in truth I wasn’t sure where I was But my friends truck was still outside So I grabbed my coat and headed out. I saw her then Sitting on the steps The last of the Scary Smooth Between her legs as she stared out Towards the shop and the sky Just beginning to lighten from Midnights oily black “Thank you.” I said She turned and looked at me Then asked me, “You ever see him, ask him to come home.” I nodded Knowing who she was talking about From the talk we’d had while the first bottle Had been divided between us. “I’ll let you know on the car” Her closing words. [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (02-11-2003 09:47 AM).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Another wonderful excerpt from your mind... I've gotta do some Iambe catchup...  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Iambe Ketchup?? Nan!! she's not just a piece of meat you know.... oh wait... catch up.... sorry... never mind... (chuckling) Kristie was commenting on a thread over in the Alley... said her car broke down yesterday and she had found a bottle of Scary Smooth to be comforting... I couldn't resist... apologies to everyone for my warped sense of humor... [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (02-11-2003 09:34 AM).] |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I feel like I walked in on the middle of a conversation. Capt.? Could you help me out? Susan C. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Nice yarn, mon. You gotsta' publish this. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
*does a little bow for Cpat and gives a lil' hug*.... Love it :-) btw...what makes you think I'd share the "Scary smooth"???? LOLOL |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
LOL "the pain in my wallet easier to endure".... my wallet doth be empty...!!!!! LOLOL I'm laughing, but feel like crying, or going insane, or something....so don't mind me! but thanks Cpat! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Susan... Iambe is a character I wrote about for several years...and in a way you did walk in on the middle ( end) of a conversation.. you can find more Iambe in the archives..but don't waste your time, it isn't worth the effort. just chuckle with me and shake your head at the crazy man. ( laughing) Sunshine... Hah!!! bah..humbug... quit grinning at me... it makes me nervous |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ed... this is just the latest in the Iambe series..and just done on a whim this morning. thanks for the comment. Kristie... now you are welcome... just an odd sense of humor on my part. As for the wallet..they are always empty when the car breaks... it is an unwritten law of nature. hang in there.. You would share with Iambe.... believe me. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'When I stopped she looked up With eyes to melt a man And to make a woman covet The easy hardness of. She and I chatted a bit Me telling her all I knew (that the car didn’t work) When I pulled the bottle Of Scary Smooth out She grinned and asked me If I’d like to go inside Maybe have one with her While she arranged to Get someone to tow my car.' First, love the warp of your inspiration. Second, short story (or why I like this line...'Me telling her all I knew (that the car didn’t work'). Few months ago, I took my car to a mechanic I've used for years and who knows that I know NOTHING about cars. After a few questions from him spoken in some mysterious mechanic language, I finally said, 'Danny, it's a red car.' And that pretty well summed up my knowledge.  Nice to see Iambe again...next chapter? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) Duncan..I once told a mechanic, "If I knew what was wrong with it, I'd have fixed it." I do know a little about cars.... and he looked at me with a half cocked head and finally grinned...after deciding not to get huffy at my smart mouthed answer. "You want to tell me what it's doing or just fix everything that is wrong with it?" was his reply.. |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
actually, the more the merrier...I would share with everyone LOL Lambe sounds interesting.... :-) I really don't care about no car, but if I miss one more day of school (after tomorrow) they are going to make me come back for another semester (which is way too much) .....not to mention work, or the fact that I want to go home..... etc etc etc I need to get drunk lol *sob* |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
sounds like you need to stay sober..( laughing) and figure out how you are going to handle all that.. then once all the steps are taken to handle what you have to... you can open that bottle of scary smooth... one step at a time girl. First figure out the priority order, list the issues ( issues not emotions) and decide what the risks are associated along with the costs... cost benefit analyssis help set final priorities and to find resolutions to issues. you can do it... but remember..it is up to you to do... no one to blame but you if you don't do it. Not that we don't still fail, but if we fail because we tried and just fell short of the goals..that's one thing. Faling because we didn't put the effort into it..totally another. |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
I guess I'm probably making myself sound like an alcoholic a bit LOL Truth is, I hardly drink.... LOL Just a bit flustered right now... but like always, I will find a way to "fix it". Just have to figure out how not to geet kicked out of school for not getting there....and how to get to work and home, etc.... Just tired LOL Thanks Cpat |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Very nice write Captn, enjoyed and kept my interest the entire way through. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
AHEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You were expecting me, right? quote: Dont make me come there to give you a good Missouri mothy mule kick in the back pockets.  To anyone who wants to read poetry in motion and story telling at its best... YES...seek out Iambe in the archives... Capt.....dont forget youre not that far away from me or Sun...we got ya covered from the east and the west..and you KNOW I got moth girlies North and South... Sens got the south covered...hehe Ya got no where to hide LMAO  Dont be talking trash bout Iambe...thats mothy fighting words [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (02-11-2003 10:16 AM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Gentle Spirit.. thank you for the nice words.. they are appreciated and I am glad you enjoyed this. Kristie.. no not at all.... didn't mean to make you think I thought you were... |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
you didn't Cpat...just a little paranoi (sp?) on my end.... I'll check out the archives and read about Iambe is it Iambe or Lambe??????? LOL |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
JM... expecting you..yeah..guess I knew you'd be in here. Now the threats are pretty intimidating...but I'm not too worried... figure I can just build a fire someplace and let you Mothy ones be drawn to it and slip away while you all watch the flames. ( chuckling) now trash.... that's not trash about Iambe... just the truth Kristie... it is iambe... but really don't waste your time girl... just tall tales and yarns not worth your time.. [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (02-11-2003 10:23 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kristi, ignore what the Cap'n's saying...about ignoring him...don't. Trust me. Well worth it. Very well worth it. heck, may have to set up a tollbooth.... SO worth it! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'figure I can just build a fire someplace and let you Mothy ones be drawn to it and slip away while you all watch the flames. ( chuckling)' Ron, I've got just the cornfield! I'll even distract the moths while you make a run for it. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Capt? hell that no fury like a moth scorched and? the fire diversion wont work... We are not mere mortal moths... WE are poetry moths...the POET is the pretty blue flame LMAO... WE GOT RADAR!!!!!  haha |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
DUNCAN???????? YOU get your butt back on the porch.... Have you forgotten your place??? Me and Sen made you and honorary moth!!!! Consider yourself TOAST Rofl |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Duncan... perfect plan.. i am sure your poetic skills would distract them while I slip away! Gosh..what a buddy to help out like that! I'll leave a bottle of the Scary Smooth out for you..that way you can entertain them too... Sun, JM... you two crack me up... Kristie... pay no attention to the ladies... listen to the old fart who wrote the drivel. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Capt. Ron, I enjoyed your poem as well as the conversation...lol . . And, from what I've read of your work, I don't blame JM and the othe Moths to tak offense at your comments about you work. You put your work down a lot and that's a definite  for a person of your talent..... . Kristie Sue, I hope your car troubles are fixed very, very soon....  . . Heart Hugs to you all...  Ethel |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kristie, pay attention. Pay very CLOSE attention... you may READ the Cap'n...you may ADORE the Cap'n's writings... you may NOT listen to him say you may NOT listen to the rest of us. Comprende? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thanks Ethel.. kind words are always appreciated.. as for me putting down my work..well... we don't always like the things we create... for me it is usually most of the time I feel that way. thanks again for the words... hugs back at you... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Now Kristie... who you gonna believe? (putting on best sincere face) I appreciate the ladies sticking up for my words...but hey... you have plenty to do and think about. I'm just looking out for your best interests here...trying to help you not waste any time reading drivel..so you can focus on the important stuff. I'd hate to see you get led astray by Sunshine and JM... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
He does tend to drivel at times Kristie. (Just helpin' out buddy!) |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thanks Dunc! (chuckling) finally someone that is honest!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'd hate to see you get led astray by Sunshine and JM... =============================== Boy oh boyeeeeeeeee You are a brave one...messing with THE SUN and the Queen Moth... BURN BABY BURN LMAO |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Duncan? C'mere.... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron.....I gotta go be a delivery girl in the rain...but I do have time for a  and a  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Martie..flower girl in rain drops today huh? thanks for the smile and the hug.. appreciated.... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Being the person that I am, I didn't listen and did a search on the Capt. Now mind you these people here keep giving me work to do, so I haven't read everything (I fully intend on doing so) but I have read some and so far I have to say this: You totally underestimate your talent. What you write is amazing and very well worth the search. Now if I could find some way to duck tape my supervisor to his chair I might be able to read on...... Susan C. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Susan.... thank you for the kind words. To fully understand Iambe you really don't need to read the poems in order, but it does sometimes help with the story line. Glad you enjoyed the ones you found. Some are better than others, some are more personal than others, and some are just written for fun... happy reading...and thank you again for the nice words... they are appreciated. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
oh my gosh, is time slipping me by? wasn't this brand new this morning? and it already has 37 replies....lol....or did I skip a day...rofg.....oh no...jb has lost track of time...what is next? wonderful write my friend....am glad Iambe still lives [This message has been edited by jellybeans (02-11-2003 03:09 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
JB...she'll never die...she'll always live in the Archives! |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
I don't know which I've enjoyed more, the poem or the repartee that has followed! Hold on, let me check... Yep, it's the poem, by a nose! Rf |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
JB.. thank you. A lot of banter..the reason so many replies... you haven't missed anything here. Now Iambe... she lives... he just isn't around to talk about her..and as of yet..not sure he is going to go back and check on her. This was a lark... my strange sense of humor gone amuck... ended the way Iambe always left things..unsettled. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(laughing) Robert..I think the ladies are far wittier than I..had my wit matched theirs the poem would not have stood a chance in such a comparison... thanks for the comment..and the read... appreciate both |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) I don't know if I wanna have any of that Scary Smooth but otherwise I felt I was there and all in that summer heat sitting on the trunk and watching the afternoon waste away! (big hugggsssssssss) This is marvelously written, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
Hey got back in just in time to catch this..I've missed you guys. I enjoyed yur story (did you pick up that slang ..yur) I'm working now and can't find time to visit much, but I still check out the discussion areas ...from time to time. *S* Nicely done as always ~Salty |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Cpat: For the record... I'm not a moth... couldn't fly if I tried, my only flutter is palpitations of the heart when I think of Toe... and I greatly prefer the warmth of his smile to scorching my hide over some flame. *G* But I'll be glad to aid and assist in the butt-kicking if you insist on maligning your formidable talent. *G* This is good. They're all good. So there. LOL Much enjoyed, Cap'n. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
As always your writes inspire much enjoyment...in itself and the replies they garner!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I"m enjoying...... |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Is there any drop of that booze left??? Darn..I'm always late when there's a party going on. We live on the same planet, why can't we live on the same time  Swell job, I like it, as everything that's behind it. I think I'll have a Cpat Hair roaming the meadows this Summer...er....a four feeted one I meant LOL and his only sound will be... baaahhh! Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Titia, you just got a giggle out of me....can't you just see a Capt. Hair, a Sunshine,a nightshade, a Toerag, a Duncan, a Balladeer, Nan, Enchantress, nakdthoughts, garysgirl, Mistletoe Angel, Martie, NewEnglandzarlu(well, another Martie), Midnitesun, Paladin, PoetDeVine, marsha, Suetang, Kethry, Regards2u, Suthern, Earth Angel, Muys, Jellybeans, Sunny One, JanetMarie, Mysteria, Professor, Doc, Paul, Wind, Gentle Spirit, Marge, Marsha, salty, Greeneyes, Carol, passingshadows, scorpio, smartchick, magnus, Bill Charles, Larry, Magnus, Auguste, Denise, Ron, Sea, ThisDiamond, 1slicklady, LongJohn, Krawdad, Elizabeth, Gemjop, Aenimal, Brad, kaile, Christian, Eric, Robert, Ratleader,.......and I just can't remember any more right now........anyway, can you just see all those sheep with those names all running around BAAABAAAAA ing at each other??LOL ...  [This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-12-2003 09:06 PM).] |
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seven_conscious Junior Member
since 2003-01-27
Posts 33 |
great story... i really enjoy your stuff |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now Ethel, really! I was QUITE pleased when Titia named her little lamb with my pen name...truly! I mean, really! I mean, I was so pleased!!! |
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shannon harter Junior Member
since 2003-02-03
Posts 31waesaw,IN USA |
maybe because im strange...or, just very imaginitive*(sp)i think its most probably just a good writer, but i was sooo right there.... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh, me too, Karilea...I even wanted her to name one Ethel Mae, but she said that she would name the little lamb "garysgirl". I love it. I want a picture of it when it's born.....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
just came by for another |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Gee,I almost missed the read and the party!! Good stuff here Captain...nice to see lambe again... and what a thread this is!! WOOOHOOOO!! ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
sorry.... HAVE to make a comment that only Toe, Suthern and LongJohn might understand... but did he say LongJohn and sheep and baaaabaaaa in the same sentence????? LOL don't know why THAT popped into my head.... |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
Am intrigued, I want to know more. Thanks. It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency. |
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