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Lady Ollyne
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0 posted 2003-02-08 04:57 PM



In Wait of Thee
Beneath the shadows of the moon, I wished upon night's sea.
Stretching towards the heavens, stepped I, into world of Thee.
I laid this head 'pon pillowed thoughts, to dream and touch thy soul.
The beating of mine heart was raised, its rhythm lost control.

Dreamt I, in the nightfall, of thine eyes that shine their blue.
If one glance was all it took, this heart fell in their hue.
You've stolen mine, it's in thy keep, forever in thine hold.
Treasured are these words I seek, as day begins its fold.

You've tasked him one too many, as the days drone on and on
Father's wish uncounted now, it's I who needs thy pawn.
A guarantee, a pledge of love, this Lady wishes for
To lift me when e'er the morn has come, each day of evermore.

She waits for thee, this Lady, mine, pens for all to see
Her Knight of blue, has chiseled heart of hers in wait of Thee.

Lady Ollyne

**sorry for anyone trying to read this as I  experimented with fonts..had trouble getting that one line that was too long to stay on one line  


[This message has been edited by Lady Ollyne (02-08-2003 05:17 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-02-08 05:12 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwwwwww, I just love this modern sonnet, sweet friend, I wish I could write sonnets like this, guess I'm just not into the syllable count system, yay, this is a true chivalrous gem, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiufl heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Lady Ollyne
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2 posted 2003-02-08 05:34 PM



Sir Noah,
This Lady did not
count syllables, she just
wrote from her heart in
a rhythmic way.

Thanking Thee,
Lady O

[This message has been edited by Lady Ollyne (02-08-2003 05:34 PM).]

Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 2003-02-08 07:41 PM


Thank you for this beauty!
It was very legible to me and a perfect valentine for somebody very special and very fortunate. Your rhythm and rhyming were perfect
LIz

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4 posted 2003-02-09 02:48 AM


very passionate, and had no trouble reading at all...nice font
ctowen
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5 posted 2003-02-09 11:57 AM


My lady, no problem following such heart's beat ....

    to easy to trace each step, each beat,
      each breath ...

            always good to read you!

the_loner_23
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6 posted 2003-02-09 11:58 AM


This is so romantic. I love this.

Cold hands means a warm heart

Midnitesun
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7 posted 2003-02-09 12:01 PM


How beautiful! No problems here with the read, it is a delightful sonnet!
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8 posted 2003-02-09 08:34 PM


This is a beautiful valentines day sonnet.
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