Open Poetry #24 |
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Cannot A Sonnet Be... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines ![]() |
Fragile Eyes I combine my words for the fragile of your eyes, blue and engaging, your view kissing mine in evening mists and dews of morn. I can taste you still, warmth of lips pressing, undressing my will, the doorway of my heart open. Hand delivered, I would to you, for at least a touch, a whispered warmth. No sonnet can this be, just free of thoughts, those of mine for you when combined, will never be lost, ever, remembering that first moment when paths crossed. You suspended me in time, when fingers graced my right cheek in parting...unknowingly, leaving your mark, a scribbling out of line, a feeling that rises me to the want of you. I wait for eyes to comfort me in the shadow's hold, for your warmth to flood my body, a feeling lifting me to that place where only the mind and body can meet, allowing the past to flow freely and touch me once more. My heart hears only the words that reach my eyes. And my eyes won't change the visions in my heart. I combine my words for the fragile of your eyes, and your eyes only. M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." (Will Moss) [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (02-08-2003 12:49 PM).] |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is so beautiful. The longing is clear to see. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
WOW Maureen, what a beautiful piece you wrote here. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I am always longing, Sue ![]() Thank you Titia, I was trying to write a new sonnet but the form wouldn't come..so this is the best I could do. hugssssssss M |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is lovely. Nice scenery of the senses. Margherita |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
And you thought mine was beautiful....Nay dear lady, not compared to thy words within.. Very well done M... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Margherita, thank you. I was trying to write a sonnet... But as you know Barry, it doesn't always turn out the way you intended. Thank you for the visit. I was listening to Norah Jones and heard somewhere in one of her songs, the words "fragile eyes"..and thought it was perfect for the one I wrote this for. M |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Maureen, since I have no idea how to write a sonnet or any of the other forms of poetry that you talented poets here write, I was really touched by your poem. In fact, did you write this one just for me?!? Because, my "whatever's" are "written from my heart" and for my Love. He loves them, so that's all that really matters. I guess you can tell that I really like this... ![]() "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-08-2003 03:26 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
thank you Ethel, but sorry to say this was written for a special someone to me...but you may use any poems I write, to send to your Gary. I guess poetry forms are easy for me because I like guidance ![]() and I like rhythm and rhyme as well as free verse. It just depends what comes to mind first. This one wouldn't sonnet itself ![]() Maureen |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A MAGNIFICENT write! Who needs a sonnet when your love is strung in such phrases of beauty I love this style Very warm, enticing, and lovely you have many talents Liz |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is a great read for me tonight |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Liz, I have to thank you for the inspiration to write yesterday. I had a lot of fun challenging myself. When I write, I have no idea how or where I am going and that is the fun part. M Dixie, I am glad you enjoyed the read last night. hugss M |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Deeply tender piece, well done. Can so relate. ThisDiamond |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
No sonnet, but so lyrical and touching, this is poetry distilled to essence, holding in every line the implication of sonnet, song and wonder. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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