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Beauty within a drunken slumber
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Beauty within a drunken slumber |
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Black Swan Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 165on the moon 
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Like a lump of sticks sprawled out awkwardly, seemingly in a daze, my intoxicated soulmate somehow sleeps. He's lying flat facing no particular direction, letting the heavy waves set on top of him, not quite sinking him into the floor.A lung rises up lazily from it's rooted self and the air around is still; so are his limbs. His body lie motionless on that unaccommodating dirty, green shag carpet. Saliva glistens in the corners of his mouth not aware of the rank smells eminating from below. Electricity buzzes around his head, dreaming a dream of something unknown. |
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bbent Senior Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 521Alaska |
And I thought love was blind.lol Enjoyed this,it was different and of coarse filled with imagery. Live like it's your last day... |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
love the imagery here! I can picture it so well and can't help but laugh. and cringe too. Enjoyed. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Very lyrical. Eric |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Good write Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
omg! is that me? can my woman smell the liquor? Nicely written! suddenly I saw her sniffing me |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a lump of sticks...I had to laugh |
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