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Open Poetry #24

Ask of me a Question

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

0 posted 2003-02-09 06:14 PM

Ask of me a question
And I promise
To tell you lies
Try to look inside me
And I'll surely don
Disguise

But seek from me a promise
And my word
Will bind us two
For once you truelly know me
You will find my promise
True

Question my intentions
And my actions
Follow through
I simply seek to rule you
And control the things you
Do

So ask of me a question
I'll explain the
Things you find
But dont search for
Explanations of the
Dangerous things you
Find

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-02-09 06:16 PM

I really like this one to

Cold hands means a warm heart

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2003-02-09 06:21 PM

wow..you sound like someone else I know...
I don't think I will ask you any questions...I am scared of how you will
answer.

besides, I like to be in control

Peter J Marcroft
Member

since 2003-02-02

Posts 265
York, England

3 posted 2003-02-09 06:23 PM

A very nice poem, one flaw is that the final stanza kinda messes up the rhythm because of the way the other stanzas are structured, however, this is a very confidently executed piece and I liked it

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-02-10 03:50 AM

sometimes it's better not to know, I think

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