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Petey
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Petey |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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Petey Angie was working the bar With a back and forth dash Like the guy at the circus That spins plates atop sticks Attending to everything That needed attention A smile and a nod, a drink and a check A joke and a beer, a smile and a drink Until, bubbling up through the clamor Were small outbreaks of rancor Rival camps were in friction Alpha males, all abristle A hard stare from Petey Toward an overlarge moron Ran taut as a wire With a subliminal hum Across the room, through the crowd From eyeball to eyeball The silent sound of horns crashing Got Angies’ attention So, she grabbed Peteys’ chin And bent him to face her “Look at me Petey” “Into my eyes” “There'll be no fighting!” “You have to respect me” “Why don’t you and your lady Go enjoy the pool table?” But the gaze of hard wire Was once again stretched From Billiard to Barstool When, undersized Petey Decided to settle it all By dropping his jeans to his knees And waggling his manhood Proving to all That he was a man Of some stature |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
ROTFL at the waggling imagery. You are such a great story teller, I think you should write a movie script or play. Honestly, your character portrayals are fantastic. "waggling his manhood" LOL And angie wins the prize: "With a back and forth dash Like the guy at the circus That spins plates atop sticks" [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (02-07-2003 12:44 AM).] |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Very descriptive...hahaha..in more ways than one! Great job! Eric |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) Well... some people just got prove themselves one way or another... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
lmao Ed love the way you weave a story great write but then they all are |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
 Man, old Petey knew how to get 'em, didn't he????? Did you know you're a mess, Mr. Ed.....lol . . Yeah, you are quite descriptive in your story-telling... and we love it. I'll bet that's what you're doing out there by the river all by yourself...you're writing a book...  [This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-07-2003 12:36 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Awright, awright, I give up! I'll go over to my Private Library right now and add you to my favorites list......... You have a good eye and a steady hand. Well done. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You always write in fine story-telling form, and today was no exception. I enjoyed the imagery--all of it! Plus, I have a BIG imagination! tehe Warm valentine hugs, EA |
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