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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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The poem that I wished To write for you I would rather write Upon you Scribing my devotions From brow to chin And from ear to collar With scripted breaths Composing my yearning From breast to breast And back again With finger and palm Write of your beauty Down it’s very length On your own pale parchment In strong, firm longhand Print fine lines, Along lithe thighs From knee to vee With teeth and tongue Then, try to memorize This song on flesh Before you let another Overwrite my verse |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
wranx - yes, it is a poem for her. Well done... BC |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
teeth? gee you are a kinky one afterall, cute poem, whos the lucky chick? |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Sensual, vivid, and descript. Excellent. ThisDiamond |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
O-M-G !!! |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Well, Ed, this is very descriptive. Wonder how long it's gonna stay here? lol  . . BTW, this reminds me of some of the poems my Love writes to me, too...... |
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poohbear19 Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 94Colorado, USA |
This is a very descriptive poem. Too bad my boyfriend doesn't write me poems like that, but I am the poem writer and writer in general. Good poem though! Andrea |
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seven_conscious Junior Member
since 2003-01-27
Posts 33 |
awesome... smacks of a certain alternative lifestyle... don't know if it was on purpose or not, (am i reading too much into it?) but if it was the references were stealthily and slickly done. what a really nice write... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
wranx - Ooooh, I do like this one!! Espcecially on this chilly night....we need "warm" words. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I love this! "..On your own pale parchment in strong, firm longhand" Original idea, creative lines... Sensual and loving in most wonderful ways. Enjoyed, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Ed, this is sizzlin' writing--and loving! Glad to see that you have kept up with your "poetry in motion" when you are not with us! Warm hugs, Linda [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (02-02-2003 10:55 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are so easy to love. This is so gorgeous...tender and full of longing and true devotion--I'd change only one thing. The title.  I wanna call it "MY Poem"... you yeti-bear you.  |
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RedTapePoetry Junior Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 19 |
kinda confusing, but kind of sensual too. all i need is a visit to the masoose and i am good to go i like it! |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Beautiful Ed....wish it was my poem. Amore Heather |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 awesome! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks all, for the reading. And Heather? You know that this is yours! Amore... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Well... you do it again... enjoyed this as usual. Hows the river these days? |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'Then, try to memorize This song on flesh Before you let another Overwrite my verse' Ya had to bring it back to reality, didn't ya?? Great write Ed. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Nice to see you up and about, with words like these it seems you've found a way to stay warm afterall. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
No more need for longjohns and wool sox? LOL, you found the very best way to stay warm. What a sensual poem!  |
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