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christian
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0 posted 2003-02-02 03:23 AM

7 Astronauts Die As Shuttle Breaks Apart

By MARCIA DUNN and PAM EASTON,
Associated Press Writers [2/1/03]

high over texas and just short of home, space
shuttle columbia fell to pieces saturday, raining
debris over hundreds of miles of countryside.
Seven astronauts perished — a gut-wrenching loss
for a country and world already staggered by
tragedy.

--

here's to you,

--

       about venus [columbia, fly]
       -------------------------------------

       you were suppose to tell me about venus--today,
       over sprite and number 5 combos
       inside that wafflehouse we agreed on before you left.

       i spent all nite on the couch--missing you
       in photographs, and
       around 6:22am--when stars faded
       and sunshine suffocated streetlamps ..

       .. i smiled.

       because you'd be here soon
       to render this crossnecklace faith of mine ..
       and make these salty eyes just, worth the while.

       i spent all morning on the porch--drinking your coffee
       while listening to the static of fm radio, and
       around 8:00am--when angels fell from beryl skies,
       my world crumbled ..

       .. and i cried,

       because .. you were suppose to come home and tell me about venus--today ..

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"and i dont want the world to see me
because i don't think that theyd
understand,
when everythings meant to be broken
i just want you to know who i am"

[goo goo dolls]
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[This message has been edited by christian (02-02-2003 03:33 AM).]

passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-02-02 04:42 AM

hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 2003-02-02 08:22 AM

Wow, this touches the heart for sure. What a lovely tribute to those lives lost and to those lives left behind. God Bless

Sunshine

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3 posted 2003-02-02 08:30 AM

Thank you,
Christian,
for a very beautiful tribute.

Midnitesun

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4 posted 2003-02-02 10:02 AM

very nicely done

Mistletoe Angel

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5 posted 2003-02-02 05:21 PM

(big hugggssssssss) Oh Christian, this is so very sad but compassionate, sweet friend, my thoughts are with all their families right now as I wonder if they will always see their loved ones faces in Andromeda! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Christian, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

garysgirl

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6 posted 2003-02-02 05:37 PM

Chris, this is a very beautiful tribute. Thank you...

Ethel

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Martie

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7 posted 2003-02-02 08:24 PM

Chris--Don't know what to say...this made me cry.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

8 posted 2003-02-02 08:26 PM

Thank you for this Chris...
I don't know what else to say really.
~hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

Jaime

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9 posted 2003-02-02 08:42 PM

This was amazingly done.. a worthy tribute. Thank you for sharing this with us all.

- Jaime

Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe.

RedTapePoetry
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10 posted 2003-02-03 12:06 PM

oh wow! this is amazing!i liked how you took on a different role and tried to play the victim in the poem. It really puts you in the shoes and it makes you feel something. i enjoyed this a lot! thanks for the tribute!

[This message has been edited by RedTapePoetry (02-03-2003 12:07 AM).]

RedTapePoetry
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11 posted 2003-02-03 12:12 PM

I live in Texas, around the Galveston area. We didn't get any debris down here but it was still really scary for something like that to happen so close to home

. God bless.

christian
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12 posted 2003-02-03 12:37 PM

red, galveston? that's pretty far down there. i
live up here in dallas/fort worth. you could hear
the sonic boom from my front porch, and yeah
it was pretty scary. too scary.

i'm sorry if i made you cry, or made you think
more that you had to. as someone who's just a dot
in this world--i just, needed to write it.

--chris.

[This message has been edited by christian (02-03-2003 12:46 AM).]

JamesMichael
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13 posted 2003-02-03 02:41 AM

You wrote it softly...James

Duncan
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14 posted 2003-02-03 09:50 AM

Written in your unique, refreshing style. Experiencing this in the first person seemed sincere and affective. Nicely done Christian.

kaile

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15 posted 2003-02-03 10:31 AM

Hi Christian,
though it may be inappropriate to say that i enjoyed the poem for this is a tribute to a tragedy, i did enjoy and nodded at your creative expressions "sunshine suffocated streetlamps" and "crossnecklace faith of mine"

BlueEyes
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16 posted 2003-02-03 10:44 AM

Christian -

First off, I loved this tribute... I can imagine this going through the minds of one of the children who lost a parent... very touching.

Second, I was going to ask you if you were from Dallas - because of one of the lines in your poems about Mayfield and Collins...but I chickened out...didn't want to sound stupid if there was a Mayfield & Collins in some other State... haha
I'm from Dallas, too...small little world of poet friends..

Enjoyed your work

BlueEyes

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17 posted 2003-02-03 08:47 PM

One of the marks of brilliant writing is not the subject matter but from which direction the subject matter is approached and described. You have chosen a path few others, with the exception of Ray Bradbury, would have considered. My highest appreciation to you, sir...

carol
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18 posted 2003-02-03 09:12 PM

Chris, i really liked this

hoot_owl_rn
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19 posted 2003-02-03 09:18 PM

I had to come back for a second look, even like it better the second time around. Fabulous bit of writing this is

christian
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20 posted 2003-02-04 02:06 PM

hey ..

::scavenges for words::

thanks ..

Dark Angel
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21 posted 2003-04-26 11:57 PM

I don't know how I missed this fabulous write.

adding YOU to my library.

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