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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I stained the toes of silken slippers trancing in the disarray casting shadows on the floor dancecards in discarded dreams... [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (02-02-2003 01:39 AM).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
bring on the alliteration and assonance  I don't know fellow K...I don't know...for so short a poem...might be a little too much, though I love this line: 'trancing in the disarray' huggles hon  K[This message has been edited by Severn (02-02-2003 01:49 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I know, fellow K... smiling... this sort of sums up how I feel about my writing right now...smile? bright lights and a big mess... huggles back you. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
bright lights big mess, so are cities, doesn't take away from its richness and character but adds to it. stop the nonsense and realize how great a writer you are silly [This message has been edited by Aenimal (02-02-2003 02:18 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Raph? Thank you, but I just seem to have lost the rhythm of the thing... hugs |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I realize what you're saying, but sometimes it's not about rhythm, but naked emotion and you have plenty of that. It's what makes you and your words beautiful, remember that and keep writing. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
bind the toe in cotton cloth listen to the wings of moth as all as to what Raph would say... and wind us in another day... [This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-02-2003 08:53 AM).] |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
serenity - gee whiz dear poetess, this blew me away this morning!! How do you do this? My muse must get together with yours and listen.listen....learn. I am putting this into my library. Thankyou. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I sing and dance alongside your words, sweet sister of the blue. My day is not complete until I've read Serenity. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful phrasing, Karen ... such a lovely flow to your thoughts. Very much enjoyed. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Simple good, is very good. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks gang, but I fear the writer's block is showing...maybe I'll keep this for another day, another write. Thanks for your kindness. |
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