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Chance of Rain |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Chance of Rain On the classical music station this morning they say chance of rain North of Paradise – they repeat this, reminding loyal listeners every place is just North of Paradise. I stop. Stop dressing for work, cease hollering: get ready for school, kids! and wonder where paradise is, this place where it never rains and death doesn’t come with the slow crawl of age, or in car accidents we pass on the freeway, and wars don’t happen along the free way. © 2003 Core [This message has been edited by Corinne (02-02-2003 12:05 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome write Cold hands means a warm heart |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Corrine, you always write so well, no matter what the subject. Thank you for sharing your work...  "Love makes the world go around" |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
real life.. so confusing. perfection is so unfathomable ins't it? Like this. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Indeed... When you find it - Let me know? Well said, C...  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I like the way you broke up the free way, Corinne, less harmful than the way the earthquakes do... Once again...when is that publishing date? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cor, Good thoughts, good write, good read, enjoyed. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Paradise Cove...that's what I thought of at first. But to find the ultimate paradise, with or without an accompanying rain... that should take a bit longer than the weather report, or perhaps it's the whether report? |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(giggles in delight) I think it would be right here in Denver, Colorado, if you truly define paradise that way! We have absolutely no precipitationn so far this year, there is no war at least on the freeways, etc.! LOL! This is wonderfully thought-provoking, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a good "thinking" poem |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I think..this moment..this slice of time punctuated with thoughtful realizations is quite indicative of the desire for the "perfect" the utopia...and the realization somewhere in a swee bit of bitter reflection we are trapped...to be human, and to endure. as usual... very well done... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Corrine, I especially liked the last line: "the free way"..... says much in relation to the rest of the poem. Enjoyed. Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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