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abbe Member
since 2003-01-20
Posts 131michigan, usa |
you my many faceted friend refract the light in a hundred shimmering personas and if your soul absorbs the light it arcs in black rainbows sparkling obsidian shimmering beautifully |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Anne, I love this poem and have such a friend. I don't see any guidelines for critiquing, which I rarely do. But I want to say if these lines were spaced out a little more and you replaced one of the shimmerings with a different word, the poem would "shimmer"... It shines as is however...I like it. Thanks, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Our friends often reflect back to us that which we project. You sparkle like black obsidian yourself! This was a beauty of a gem! Warm hugs, EA |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Anne this is quite beautiful though I'd agree with Pat, on the shimmering. I have a friend like this too, amazing isn't it? this made me smile.Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! |
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abbe Member
since 2003-01-20
Posts 131michigan, usa |
thanks for your suggestion... i'm going to play with the shimmering... i appreciate your words. this is one of my favs - simply because of the person it is about, a very unique friend. |
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