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Ada'doLisdo'ti
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0 posted 2003-01-30 01:55 PM


I know I'm to young to be alone.
I hope that the best years aren't gone.
We dance in a circle on and on.
Gently we hold, but so fierce and strong.

I hold you closely and feel it start.
That fimilar beating in my heart.
I thought it turned to stone.
But still afraid to be alone.

Here we are face to face.
Scared because of this place.
Holding on for sanity sake.
Praying that the stone does break.

Both know we're to young to be alone.
Hoping that the best years aren't gone.
We dance in a circle on and on.
Gently we hold, but so fierce and strong.

As we dance the ice melts away.
I feel the warmth as we sway.
I've not felt like this in ages.
This memory does turn times pages.

Back to a diffrent time and place.
Where you now stand was another face.
We danced at a much faster tempo.
And the worlds turn was slow.

Both thought we're to young to be alone.
Hoping that the best years weren't gone.
We danced in a circle on and on.
Gently we held, but so fierce and strong.

[This message has been edited by Ada'doLisdo'ti (01-30-2003 02:00 PM).]

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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2003-01-30 02:00 PM


Ada'doLisdo'ti
A good write, enjoyed the read.

jade dragoness
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2 posted 2003-01-30 02:04 PM


It's nice to find a good dance partner that might become more. No need to dance alone.
Sunshine
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3 posted 2003-01-30 02:26 PM



I enjoyed the repetitiveness
of specific lines, Ada'...
it does carry the beat of a long-lost
tune, and read under the right
conditions could make one feel a little
dizzy...

one more time around, please...

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