Open Poetry #24 |
Forgiveness |
WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
I'm not a crazed killer you know, it's not like blood is pooling on the floor of the closet under last nights kill. I mean, you accuse me, with pointed blame misplaced finger, pushing ever down my throat, your useless rhetoric about sanity, and vanity, the lack of your reality. Where do I begin, where do you leave off, the line is so faded now, I feel encroached upon, and on, and on, and you just go on. Brand me okay, place the hot iron upon my flesh and mark me with your righteousness scar me with your ever present and unpleasant, characterizations of who, of what I am, of what I've done. As if it's fun, to pick apart the already useless heart that beats only slightly as I try to catch my breath. Will it take in fact my death before forgiveness touches me. WhiteRose |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
The anguish of a soul is never something to applaud...But I applaud your talent and courage to write the feeling so well. All prayers to you. ThisDiamond |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
the limits of criticism is interesting to conjecture, important for you not to brand yourself for another's pleasure of the 'critique'..that's what I get from your poem [This message has been edited by ecrivan (01-28-2003 10:45 PM).] |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
I could feel your hurt as i read this. It took a lot of courage to write this. it was pretty [This message has been edited by carol (01-28-2003 10:47 PM).] |
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Jaime
Registered
MemberPosts 250 |
I really like how this feels like I'm listening to your conversation with this person. I like how it's got an edge to it, yet there's still pain in it so that it's not just some full-blown rant. (I can never seem to pull this effect off.) Kudos to you. - Jaime Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...please take care of you...hugs and prayers |
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