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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-01-26 05:59 PM



Silent Utterances

Though she never held
the babe from birth, but only
days into weeks into months after,
still,
a connection of the heart
held them then,
holds them now…

the child always knew
when the mother
pained…

She loved to claim her ESP,
as mothers do,
knowing things that mothers
should never know,

and she was going to live to be
one hundred and fifty, to outlast
that gosh-awful red furniture,
inherited by the mere fact
her own mother did not wish
to want it any longer,

so when the silent sigh escaped
her lips
as the upholstered red wearing
wore thin,
was a relief the child heard,
though hundreds of miles away…

She had grown to womanhood
with a giving father
who lost it all in illness; she realized
the spoil of her gains,
and did not bring that to her children…

so her only claim to beauty
was the bright red of lips, slicking
brilliant against her pale countenance,
but her eyes, her green eyes,
were ever brilliant, so much so that between
her eyes,
and her lips,
her face glowed, certainly
and most especially, under his gaze…

but the silent utterances
between mother, and child, were never
worn thin, nor masked by lips, red,
nor spoiled by gifts of time,
nor heard, by others…

and come to the daughter, today,
through touching wisps of fog in May,
or childhood’s blue of sky,
or the feel of aging skin under fingertips,
as she recalls the way her mother’s
felt at this age…

the day of that call,
an announcement of her mis-belief,
from one who claimed
the sky was green if she said so,
that one hundred and fifty candles
would never grace a cake,
the push-pull of the joke-curt truth,

left each silent,
uttering unheard thoughts,
pushing love through the phone cords
faster than the speed of sound,
as silent tears came
from wells of forever love…

the child always knew
when the mother
pained…

what do you want me to do?

Understand,


Silent utterances.


[This message has been edited by Sunshine (01-26-2003 06:24 PM).]

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Duncan
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since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455

1 posted 2003-01-26 06:26 PM


but the silent utterances
between mother, and child, were never
worn thin, nor masked by lips, red,
nor spoiled by gifts of time,
nor heard, by others…

and come to the daughter, today,
through touching wisps of fog in May,
or childhood’s blue of sky,
or the feel of aging skin under fingertips,
as she recalls the way her mother’s
felt at this age…

the day of that call,
an announcement of her mis-belief,
from one who claimed
the sky was green if she said so,
that one hundred and fifty candles
would never grace a cake,
the push-pull of the joke-curt truth,'

I liked these verses, especially.  The strength of the bond and the pain of the bond changing.

peppermint35
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since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106
Texas, USA
2 posted 2003-01-26 06:36 PM


This is so supremely poignant and so wonderfully written.

Thank you for sharing these emotions.

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
   Percy Bysshe Shelley

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
3 posted 2003-01-26 07:06 PM


Sunshine,
I could feel the tug and pull that is the bond of love.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
4 posted 2003-01-26 07:45 PM


"as silent tears came
from wells of forever love…

the child always knew
when the mother
pained…

what do you want me to do?

Understand,

Silent utterances."
------------------------------------------
Yes..I know..and understand.
~Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
5 posted 2003-01-26 07:57 PM


I think my favorite of your writes. Beautiful expressions. ThisDiamond
Janet Marie
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6 posted 2003-01-26 11:17 PM


so her only claim to beauty
was the bright red of lips, slicking
brilliant against her pale countenance,
but her eyes, her green eyes,
were ever brilliant, so much so that between
her eyes,
and her lips,
her face glowed, certainly
and most especially, under his gaze

=============================


and come to the daughter, today,
through touching wisps of fog in May,
or childhood's blue of sky,
or the feel of aging skin under fingertips,
as she recalls the way her mother's
felt at this age

===========================

left each silent,
uttering unheard thoughts,
pushing love through the phone cords
faster than the speed of sound,
as silent tears came
from wells of forever love


the child always knew
when the mother
pained

what do you want me to do?

Understand,

Silent utterances.

===========================

Oh my Kari... oh my oh my oh my....

shall we talk about the fact that there was no tissue warning first? or shall we talk about the oh so impressive personification, imagery and character defining, the depth of emote in this... better yet...lets just get to the point...
PUBLISH!!!  You take your writing to a higher level with this one dear poetess of the sun.


Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky.
We fell them down and turn them into paper that
we may record our emptiness.

K.G.


[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (01-26-2003 11:23 PM).]

Rick
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since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia
7 posted 2003-01-26 11:55 PM


Dear Sunshine, a wonderful writing that makes us read more than once, to enjoy more than once, your talents are pulling at deep felt emotions that have found their way to our hearts and soul, inspiring us to persist in our passion for the written word.

Again, wonderful work, much enjoyed.

Sincerely
Rick

Nan
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8 posted 2003-01-27 09:28 AM


Every mother and her child are connected indeed... Once and Forever... This is lovely, Sunshine...

[This message has been edited by Nan (01-27-2003 09:59 AM).]

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
9 posted 2003-01-27 07:59 PM


pushing love through the phone cords *s a great line


there is so much in this that I liked Karilea...


M

Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056
Kansas USA
10 posted 2003-01-27 11:25 PM


Ditto to all the excellent comments above and I echo, "Publish!"
This poem is rare and exceptional in it's beautiful emotional sensitivity.  But then, you are rare and exceptional in expressing that!

Shenachie

[This message has been edited by Bridget Shenachie (01-27-2003 11:26 PM).]

Eromyna
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since 2002-11-29
Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA
11 posted 2003-01-27 11:28 PM


"the child always knew
when the mother
pained"

Good read. I'm still thinking.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

garysgirl
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12 posted 2003-01-27 11:31 PM


Karilea, my daughter and I talked on the telephone today...across the miles. Yes, there will always be a bond.....
Thank you....

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (01-27-2003 11:31 PM).]

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

13 posted 2003-01-27 11:55 PM


childhood's blue of sky,
or the feel of aging skin under fingertips,



WOW!!!!!! I love those analogies...


childhood's blue of sky

IWIHWT!!!!

Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky.
We fell them down and turn them into paper that
we may record our emptiness.

K.G.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

14 posted 2003-01-28 08:05 AM


deeply touching...
Tari Miriel
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since 2003-01-28
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The state of mind
15 posted 2003-01-28 08:10 AM


Breathtaking~
VAS
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since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
16 posted 2003-01-28 09:40 AM


filled

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Sandpiper
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since 2002-06-15
Posts 738
land of flora and fauna
17 posted 2003-01-29 05:34 AM


All I can say is..beautiful!!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

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