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Dr.Moose1
Member Elite

since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

0 posted 2003-01-28 05:18 PM

There are things which take place
long un-noticed it seems,
they occur at a pace
much too slowly to see.

Where a flower unfolds
in the blink of an eye,
there, time flows, glacier-like,
quite miraculously.

As I lay 'neath a sky
of impossible hue
watching planets revolve,
childrens' toys on a string,

fancied visions appear
to unfold right on cue.
Given time to evolve,
what might this future bring?

Gathered wool, spinning yarns
of such delicate thread,
'neath the cover of sleep
on a distant plateau.

Shall these moments endure,
and if such be the case,
when the dreamer awakes
might some part of it show?

Who can say what the dawn
of each day will erase?
Where the future still yawns
only dreams know his face.

[This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (01-28-2003 06:24 PM).]

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2003-01-28 05:43 PM

Who can say what the dawn
of each day will erase?
Where the future still yawns
only dreams know his face.

wonderful writing and a beautiful ending verse.
*S
M

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-01-28 05:48 PM

Awesome write

Cold hands means a warm heart

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

3 posted 2003-01-28 05:49 PM

cool Dr. M very cool

Dr.Moose1
Member Elite

since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

4 posted 2003-01-28 06:47 PM

nakd,
Thank you. I'd been toying around with anapestic trimeter, enjoying the "flow" so to speak, when it dawned on me that the rythmic cadence of this particular form was so similar to relaxed breathing that I almost fell asleep. Maybe that's why this
write took me three or four days to complete, I probably dozed off somewhere in the process.
Doc

loner,
Thanks.I'm glad you enjoyed.
Doc

Wayout,
Thanks Walt.
A dash of meta-physical, a pinch of philosophical, stirred, (never shaken)
bonds the Doc to his bed and the dreams in his head. Ya gotta love cocktail hour!
Doc

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2003-01-28 09:03 PM

Doc--There is a peaceful feel about this poem....beautifully done, I might add. PS..also enjoyed the comments you made in reply.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-01-28 09:07 PM

Doc, I liked the poem and your
comments, too.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Dr.Moose1
Member Elite

since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

7 posted 2003-01-29 06:15 PM

Martie,
Thank you. While my imagery pales in comparison to yours, I'd like to think I'm improving a bit. glad you liked.
Doc
garysgirl,
Thanks. Sometimes I know I get a little wordy, but hey, that's why I'm here.
Doc

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