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Poetic Bard
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since 2003-01-22

Posts 84
Canada, BC

0 posted 2003-01-28 02:54 PM

~Death on Swift Winds~

He comes,
Slowly,
Cursed by time,
Driven by the eternal quest,
He seeks your being,
Your soul,
Your heart,
By no romantic notion,
Does he wish for these things,
These items of which to behold,
To be beheld,
He comes then,
On the swift winds of fate,
He holds the key,
The date of dreading,
When all turns to dust,
And dust then to memories,
See there he flies,
On the swirf winds of an ebon sky,
Death flies this night,
On a soul filled sky.

I bleed, you all read, and may the blood never stop spilling for loss of emotion would be all too damning.
~Joel

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-01-28 05:50 PM

I really liked the read.

Cold hands means a warm heart

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

2 posted 2003-01-28 05:58 PM

pretty cool imagery

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

3 posted 2003-01-28 06:57 PM

I'll be spending the rest of the evening picturing a soul filled sky.
I'm thinking.. clouds of memories...
interesting, and thought provoking, much enjoyed.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Poetic Bard
Member

since 2003-01-22

Posts 84
Canada, BC

4 posted 2003-01-28 07:01 PM

Well, I'm glad you all liked it. I kinda liked it, but, I wasn't sure about it for some reason.

I bleed, you all read, and may the blood never stop spilling for loss of emotion would be all too damning.
~Joel

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

5 posted 2003-01-28 09:37 PM

Wonderful work. Impressive images and powerful emotions. ThisDiamond

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2003-01-29 05:07 AM

thought provoking, yes

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

7 posted 2003-01-29 02:49 PM

What a great ending this one has....loved the final two lines

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

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Between the Lines

8 posted 2003-01-29 05:52 PM

Joel some very pretty lines here..I hope you are staying with us.

M

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

9 posted 2003-01-29 06:52 PM

I , too, like:

..."On a soul filled sky"....

as well as the rest of the poem.

Enjoyed. Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

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