Open Poetry #24 |
To A Daughter |
Thisman Junior Member
since 2003-01-21
Posts 19 |
pay attention this is the path on each side is danger follow carefully you might notice the smell of cinnamon and excrement at times it will be hard to tell which is which don't let such things distract you try this on it's a coping device it will allow you to get past obstacles such as loneliness and frustration my parents gave it to me I have tried to improve upon it somewhat at first, you will notice that I become continually larger filling up a substantial portion of your view after a few years, I will grow so small as to be insignificant then, perhaps after I am no longer with you I will become large again don't let this trouble you at this point it is simply a paradox of this place for now I will guide both of us later, I will fall back and you will move on alone you might notice, far up ahead on the mountain is a single silver light no matter what happens keep moving toward it any questions? good; take my hand |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I've read this three times, and just don't know the correct way to reply to it. I love it. Thats all I can really say. A very interesting take on a father's veiw and guidance. Jenn Did I say welcome yet? ~~I Love You~~ |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I love this, too, and I fully understand this. It's really beautiful, the way you put it into words.... "Love makes the world go around" |
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Tari Miriel Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 69The state of mind |
Your daughter has many riches, her father's wisdom the most invaluable~ |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Though probably not intended this makes me grin......perhaps, in the reality of it....the sureness... I like it a great deal. Reminds me of someone I know. Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Love the way you did this, quite creative...makes one think!!! Welcome! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
I love this i have one written to my daughter also i havent posted it yet |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
OH YES! what a brilliant piece! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ThisMan~ Oh, the tender of it all~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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