Open Poetry #24 |
Passionate |
SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Kisses fall upon skin heated by lover’s touch in random patterns, spelling out what no words really could ache....need.....desire.... passion Heartbeats scream in the night felt, yet gone unheeded drowning in the soft whisperings between two souls entwined so enraptured with love ~SEA~ [This message has been edited by SEA (01-24-2003 01:23 AM).] |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
~ The soul lies buried in ink that does not flow ~ |
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Poetic Bard Member
since 2003-01-22
Posts 84Canada, BC |
A beautiful piece, all the thoughts and emotions where very vivid through out that entire poem. Beneath, there is more beneath, but, what is there in the end? More beneath? Or something more? |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Not Cinquains, but sweet. This doesn't need that form to work. It's better as it's written here, and it's just perfect for Ratleader to read at 10:10 pm local.... Most of my poetry's hard and terse, and I admire folks who can write softly without losing strength. There's room for both kinds, after all. One fiat: Write only the word or phrase that only you would say. If anything anywhere in a poem sounds like someone else might have said it sometime, they did, and you probably shouldn't. Guard against that and you'll be fine.... |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you Sharon PB.. thank you Ratleader... you're right, messed that up nicely didn't I?! opps, tired tonight....added an extra line in each one. well shoot...lol thanks, I'll just go fix that title |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sounds silky and warm...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! what a passionate write! you described it to a tee |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a nice comment from Ratleader... SEA...so glad you're back. Passions has been missing you! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
should have known you would capture the subject in a gracefully stimulating way... nice stuff Sea.. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you all very much, last night after I went to bed, lol I couldn't sleep cause I thought, no, I added two extra lines..sheesh.... and yes, Sunshine, it was really nice Ron... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very nicely done Susan! Much enjoyed! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Two souls enraptured, entwined in love. You wrote it well. Enjoyed. Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Susan, I just love this, sweet friend, this made me smile as such love and passion fills your words and is destined to make your sweetheart swoon, yay! (kiss on cheek) I love this, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
ah Sea, as always a joy to read. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sea, this is just like the title...passionate I loved it.... . . . (pssst....I'm enjoying your responses in the "other" forum......HeeHee) "Love makes the world go around" |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Most enjoyable to read. The first stanza captures how one can feel when in love that words just cannot describe, but only actions in the throes of passion, perfectly. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
SEA - a'hhhhhhhhhh, nice..... BC |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Very nice SEA..very nice!! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
This indeed is a hot piece of great wording to develop such soft sighs. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Now how did I miss this HOT poem? Sounds like a pretty good night. The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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