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Dance Evergreen
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Dance Evergreen |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
From ~ever~ I emit vulnerability standing clothless in glaring sunlight wasting no time dazzling some who come to play my game of love. Oh, how we dance evergreen in sparkling love dust, like unraped souls at birth, are we. Ah, how we party into moonglow a day well spent we shining, like every star we are. Yet, there are those who see me weak, a chance to further their deceit, side by side, to walk with me, oh, no! they, incomplete. For, they cannot laugh my song until they've paid the price to get into this heaven's show. For, I have danced on ~my~ coffin, with much zeal, I've known the fire, and, now I'm real. Not just anyone can dance evergreen, first, they must feel. . . . ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Sounds like the pixies are at it again clothless in glaring sunlight Oh, how we dance evergreen in sparkling love dust, Dust me with thine eyes Brush me with thine wing Let me gaze in cloudless skies And here the Siren sing For, I have danced on ~my~ coffin, with much zeal, Is this just perchance a dream Have I fallen from the living Drowning in the sparking stream Bludgeoned by beauty given. Interesting write Gives many images and rise to much thought Gloom |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Pat, this is different than anything I've seen of your poetry. I really do like it, though. It has a magical feel to it, somehow...  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
For, they cannot laugh my song until they've paid the price to get in oout of context her perhaps...but it says volumes... enjoyed this... a great deal. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Pat, It ended well, enjoyed. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing write!! Much enjoyed the read Pat. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome write! and the last lines are terrific! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Professor, Thanks for reading and replying. I so enjoyed your input. Glad it leaves something to think about.  Ethel, Glad you like it. If I wrote as 'far out there' as I'd like, few would understand it...so try to tone it down Not that I am so brilliant, that I'm so whacko, sometimes....I say that smiling......hugs.... Ron, Thanks for commenting....I am thinking.................hmmmmmmm... I have to go to work so won't see any further comment if you make any so just consider I am ....thinking........still trying to break my brain loose....so fogged from non-use or never-use...blocked not from....oh, never mind...this is more in the line of how I'd like to write and it is getting there, slowly.... if you have another comment, that would be great, however I won't be able to get back here to read it for awhile... Really appreciate you, thanks Sy and Enchantress, Thanks, Hugs to all of you, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
For, they cannot laugh my song until they've paid the price to get in, or follow my tears to any meaning without also tasting my days just seems to be aline in there somewhere...that takes the whole..and condenses it into an essence.... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Dixie, Thanks, glad you liked. Ron, Okay...still here.....am thinking.... thank you so much for taking your time and I will consider what you mean... Wish I had more time right now... drats...am running late.... Smiles to you both, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Patricia, I love that kind of poetry that "flings", I felt the ping-pong inunctation reading this! (kiss on cheek) You are one talented troubadouress, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patricia, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Pat...this is so interesting, a twirl of mind, yours and then mine. Much enjoyed! |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Wow, read this a few times. I almost thought I understood it for a second, then I was lost again.. but lost to a dream. A dream I like. Quite beautiful work.. I just walked in the door from school though, maybe I'll be back later after reading this a dozen more times! Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
For, I have danced on ~my~ coffin, with much zeal, I've known the fire, and, now I'm real. Not just anyone can dance evergreen, first, they must feel. Very unique write Pat. Enjoyed the style and feel of this. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Noah, Thanks for your reply. Most welcome. Martie, Yes, smiling, a twirl of my mind, glad it makes your go round a bit.... Alyssa, You will, for if anyone has the ability to figure this out, you do!! Hugs and love to you, Duncan, Thank you for taking the time and replying...your comments are encouraging and greatly appreciated. Thanks to all, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
sounds like you've been down in the trenches and got your self together, not taking any prisoners along for the ride anymore.then again, maybe i missed the boat,afterall, but i find a lot of strenght from lived life in your writing |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Pat, yay I think I've got it right then(and the first time too), well right as in what you meant by it. I'm sure I've ready it a good twenty times by now. Love it alot! especially like these lines "For, I have danced on ~my~ coffin, with much zeal, I've known the fire, and, now I'm real." Love and hugs, Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
I enjoyed the lightness of this. Very different. Enjoyed SimplyGold |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh, how we dance evergreen in sparkling love dust, ~*~ For some reason, evergreen has always had a special meaning to me... and when it's used in poetry, or song? It's usually very special... Thank you! |
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