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Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

0 posted 2003-01-23 05:08 PM

Frail is the evening of frigid shadows
and chimney smoke,
obscuring mocking stars.
They laugh.
They’ve always laughed,
but I cannot…

not always.

Dormant is the artist, no beauty-strokes of brush.
Dormant is the winter,
a portrait of death.
The artist’s hand is stilled,
or is it killed,
only to be resurrected in the Spring?

Perhaps never.

I cannot scream and bleed upon the page
to vent  my rage,
for it’s contained.
No inspectors or sanctions.
It’s my personal weapon of mass destruction.
We all have one,
so it would seem.

I keep mine hidden.

I’m a man who won’t step on an ant
and detest that part of me at times.
I wish I had a zipper
so I could unzip and step out of self.
Then  I would be free…

of me,

at least for a little while,
only to return
and probe my thoughts once more.
For now,
they are at

war.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2003-01-23 05:28 PM

Michael--To unzip and step out of self would be a relief at times for me also...but it would be too difficult to step back in. This poem's emotional impact is felt, my friend.

Salty
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since 2002-11-23

Posts 669
Texas

2 posted 2003-01-23 05:31 PM

OH man!!! have I been there before...inside myself...fighting every issue.

YOu said it all perfectly

~Salty

In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you.
--Deepak Chop

SEA

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since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2003-01-23 06:11 PM

Michael,
free verse is lookin REAL good on you!
wow mister, awesome

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2003-01-23 06:21 PM

(sigh) Oh Michael, this is lovely, sweet friend, I agree that we should all do this every once in a while, though it would be so uncomfortable to get back in and all the while it seems as long as you can find a refuge within this realm that is more worth your while! (big hugggsssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2003-01-23 06:25 PM

"I wish I had a zipper
so I could unzip and step out of self.
Then I would be free…

of me,"

oh how I understand...I've been running from me my entire life...

this is a beauty Michael.

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

6 posted 2003-01-23 07:31 PM

I cannot scream and bleed upon the page
to vent my rage,
for it’s contained.

Michael my friend, How well I can relate to this. Well done. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2003-01-23 08:14 PM

Excellent write m'friend!
I know this feeling all too well I'm afraid.
Hope you are well...and smiling.
~Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

8 posted 2003-01-23 08:43 PM

Extremely vivid emotions here. Always well written. Was thinking that my weakest feeling moments, brought the hero out of me...I think it must be meant that way.
ThisDiamond

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

9 posted 2003-01-23 09:29 PM

Michael,

Very powerful. And, yes, you do write free verse very well. Can't remember any others.

Enjoyed, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

10 posted 2003-01-23 09:36 PM

I cannot scream and bleed upon the page
to vent my rage,
for it’s contained.
No inspectors or sanctions.
It’s my personal weapon of mass destruction.
We all have one,
so it would seem.

I keep mine hidden.

What a great verse that is!

There is something to be said for picking
our battles....and fighting the good fight.

Enjoyed this Auguste~

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

11 posted 2003-01-25 01:09 PM

Michael, I wasn't on here much for a few days because of the very reason you spoke of in this poem. Sometimes no matter how hard I try, I go into myself, and that's when I get so depressed. Gary has been a life-saver to me where this is concerned. He knows me so well that he seems to be able to see inside my mind. Sometimes I get a little bit aggravated because he can do this. Most of the time, though, I'm so grateful to him because if it wasn't for him I wouldn't face up to me, at times. Well, didn't mean to write all that or to reveal that part of myself, but I guess I just did, didn't I?
.
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I always love to read your poetry, dear friend. I have a lot of it in my library and this is where this one's going, too.
.
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BTW, I really do miss you whenever I don't see you here on these pages of blue. You're one of my favorite writers, kind sir.....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

12 posted 2003-01-25 09:19 PM

We'd all love to have one of those zippers, methinks - What a great concept - Well said, Sir Auguste...

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

13 posted 2003-01-26 04:50 AM

very painful, I feel it

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

14 posted 2003-01-26 05:23 AM

~I wish I had a zipper
so I could unzip and step out of self.
Then I would be free…

of me,~

oh how I hear you, think many are related by your words here.

((hugs))
Charisma

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

15 posted 2003-01-26 06:31 PM

Martie,
Thank you, dear one, your thoughts on my work always mean so much to me.

Salty,
Thank you much! I really appreciate you reading.

Susan,
You're so sweet, thank you, Susan!

Noah,
Your replies also always so thoughtful and kind.  Thank you, my friend.

Karen,
Thank you!  Yeah, it would seem that I've also done some of that running.  It's nice to see you here.

Chris,
Thank you so much, my friend.

Nancy,
Yes, I'm doing very well, thank you.  I hope you are also.

ThisDiamond,
I do believe also that in our weakest moment it is when we grow much needed strength.  Thank you!

Pat,
It's not often that I write free verse so there's not much to look for. LOL!  Thanks!

BluesSerenade,
Thank you...and I appreciate you picking out that particular verse, it's my favorite.

Ethel,
Hi there!  I had no idea you liked my poetry that much, but it DOES make me feel good knowing so, thank you!  Gary sounds like a great guy, by the way!

Nan,
Yeah, sometimes it would be good if we could just step outside ourselves for a short while to find some peace.  Thanks Nan!

Dixie,
If you felt it, then I must've expressed it well.  Thank you, my friend.

Charisma,
Thanks a bunch and great to see you on another rotation in Deputy Mod.  Hugs

Everyone, thank you!  I do so appreciate you reading.

Sandpiper
Senior Member

since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
land of flora and fauna

16 posted 2003-01-27 05:54 AM

Your thoughts are heard, well done!!!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

17 posted 2004-05-05 02:47 AM

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