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Once Upon A Time
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Once Upon A Time |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas 
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We bonded in hopes of castles and prayer gardens A unity of our soul that was never to be separated We were to be one a life of fairytales come true I had dreamed of being with you long before we met Wished upon the night’s first star that I Would accompany you along life’s path. Days and Nights drifted until time found us together A little girl was borne to complete this package. But, in every fairytale walks a villain in this one Walked We. Our life twisted and turned until broken crayons marked boldly outside the lines of our tinker toy dreams Paper doll houses and Barbie doll Vets Play-do walks along the church steps printed pledges from erasable ink and our sip of life... from a Kool-aid drink. But our love was real once . Upon a time . [This message has been edited by Salty (01-24-2003 01:09 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Salty An elegant write, enjoyed. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
How bittersweet is this~ Our sip of life... from a Kool-aid drink. Nice writing Salty girl, even though it leaves an after taste. More sugar, sugar.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic write Salty!! Much enjoyed the read. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Our life twisted and turned until broken crayons marked boldly outside the lines of our tinker toy dreams Paper doll houses and Barbie doll Vets Play-do walks along the church steps printed pledges of an erasable ink and our sip of life... from a Kool-aid drink. But our love was real once Childhood and fairytales...wonder why we ever leave. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Salty, I just wish we could all just live in those special times, I always loved seeing little girls play with My Little Ponies and Barbies and little boys climbing trees and playing hopscotch! (sigh) This is beautifully sad, sweet friend, I wish for love to always remain like this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Salty, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
Thank you all so much for responding. This was about me and a childhood sweetheart that I actually played house with when I was young....we ended up getting married after several years. What I thought was going to be me and my soul mate turned outto be one of the most painful relationships of my life. Our life together ended in a charade...not unlike our childhood play. Things were a little easier as child though sometimes it would be nice to back...to Innocence and sipping life though a Kool-aid drink. I appreciate each and every one of your responses thank you for stopping in and sharing this with me. ~Salty [This message has been edited by Salty (01-24-2003 11:36 AM).] |
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A Tone of Voice Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 287 |
This made me sad, but then I was there in the shadows watching the fairy tale unfold and then unravel. Excellent write Salty, straight from the heart~! *S* ~ATov |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Salty, So very well written. You captured what millions go through...and it is a wonder, when it seemed so right in the beginning. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yes, Salty girl, lots have been in this place of having to grow up and see that it was all a fairy-tale....or most of it, anyway.... Good write, friend... "Love makes the world go around" |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
A Tone of Voice & Regards It can be scary when you put it all out there...in one basket...and figure out it was the wrong one. ATOV you always told me it was a Love Story, it just didn't have a happy ending. Amazing how love and hate walk hand in hand isn't it? He turned into my posion...and I'm glad I don't have to deal with it any longer. Thank you both so much for reading me today. Salty |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
And I know you know Ethel .... but we move on and find better places to be. Learning and growing from past mistakes. Thank U for stopping in... Hope you are feeling better these days. ~Salty |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wouldn't it be nice if we could stay in times like those? I remember a few of my own *smiling* |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Salty - sadness is in your words, but they are so very true. Best to you... BC |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Salty, I could see the pain in the broken crayons, sometimes first loves are merely crushes and that's what they do.Glad to see you are moving on. Well written. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
So well done. Vivid recollections of the fading of light. ThisDiamond |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
A painfully delightful write... But, in every fairytale walks a villain in this one Walked We. ~ So you are not putting the blame on either of you, that you consider both of you two, villains? |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
Thank you everyone for stopping in and reading. Opeth you asked if I put the blame on both of us.... That's a long story *S*. Actually he became very abusive to me, extremely jealous and impossible.. but in all fairness..I must add, maybe it was the fact that we just didn't work together. He seems to have done an about face now that he is with someone else. I truly do not have feelings for him anymore ...except for not very pleasant ones. It's amazing to me...what we were..what "IT" became...and what it is now. WHEW...I'm glad to be out of there ! -- You people are wonderful..You Know? Thank you again for stopping in to read me. ~Salty [This message has been edited by Salty (01-27-2003 11:38 AM).] |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
The good news is that you got out of that abusive relationship and are in, what appears to me, much happier times. Husbands, boyfriends, etc...abusing the ones they are supposed to love and cherish is sickening to me. [This message has been edited by Opeth (01-26-2003 12:19 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Salty--I like the way you wrote this, quite impactful. Sad the changes that take couples away from those first promises. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Salty, it was really sad, and really great. Can't think of anything else I need to add that hasn't allready been said. I am living proof that ghosts exist. Which is an oximoron but I don't care ;) |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Salty, You must have been inside my head once. I related to this very much. Seems like so long ago now. SG |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed this |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
i really liked this. It was very sad but real. (¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨) |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Wow Salty, from one Texan to another, that one really made you feel it, sure brought back some sad memories. Pepper |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
Thank you for reading and responding you sweet people you!! Simply Gold ...hope things are better for you now. I am much better, but still carry a lot of scars. Howdy there Pepper...you come back now ..ya hear?  Thanks again everyone ..for stopping by and reading. |
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