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Goodnight In the Mind of Garden
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Goodnight In the Mind of Garden |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
“Tea?” she asked in genteel softness as with a wave another was dismissed. “Please” I answered. I watched the graceful wrist as she poured Fine English black from delicate china. Her eyes met mine again as she asked, “I understand you write. Is that true?” Someone has done you a disservice Ma’am to tell you I write.” “I scribble thoughts from time to time, but, I would not consider myself a writer.” “Are you being modest, sir?” “No,Ma’am.” “Well never no mind your playing coy sir.” “I would have you write me.” I watched her eyes for clues Wondering if I could indeed capture her With a few words or many. “Ma’am, I am honored you would ask, but fear indeed I would disappoint.” “Nonsense!” “More tea?” “No thank you, I really must be going.” “You have been a gracious hostess and thank you, for showing me your beautiful house and treasures.” As I was rising to leave, She touched my hand and smiled. “ You will write me you do not strike me as the type who could resist temptation.” “I have tempted you and you have seen but a part of my home.” “You will write me sir, and be ugly about my faults.” “Then as time passes and you find yourself remembering me You will write my love” I thanked her again and found my coat Waiting at my arm as another to be dismissed handed it to me. When the door closed I felt the shiver Of her cackling laugh. Today she proves herself right And I sit down with pen to write her Feeling as if I have been seduced. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
... [looking for exactly the right feel to impart the emotion you just wrung out... I'll be back.] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat Hair Good thoughts, good write, good read. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I liked this very much. Some people do exude such power. Enjoyed, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
“ You will write me you do not strike me as the type who could resist temptation.” I like the idea that the writer has no choice in the matter. And the woman who could evoke this...  Damn, I miss the South. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you have me there with you, although I would never have laughed..just smiled.  M |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Today she proves herself right And I sit down with pen to write her Feeling as if I have been seduced ================================== It was the TEA!!!! She knows what we too know... and your pen proves her and us right you are a writer...(dont argue with the moth) OH and by the way .... when you write of her...just for, shall we say --color and dramatic effect....dont forget to make the tea....raspberry *L* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron....Never argue with a lady...you are a writer! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Color and dramatic effect? lol@JM The tea would be mint, I believe. With a shot of bourbon in the winter. Ron? |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Some women can be so evil.  Be warned of her type ... Hugs, Marti |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oh my....Jan cracks me up. and methinks? You should be grateful that she let you walk out of there? bwahahahahahaha...... |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Yes you have the reader right at the place... i truly enjoyed your wording embrace Hope |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! the art! what a write! I enjoyed this! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Seems she's had her way with you, m'friend... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
wonderful write....I just love the way you wrote 'her'.....much enjoyed |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
... Damn!! |
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