Open Poetry #24 |
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Hong Kong 1996 |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden ![]() |
Babylon boasted but one tower; here hundreds reach through haze towards an attainable heaven. But who needs God where Mammon lays every hill and mountain low, makes every rough place plain? Yet even here temples squat cowering between skyscrapers. Incense sweetens the traffic fumes. II Rolling on the floor like a drunk, a legless man rattles his tin. Commuters flow round him, over him, as a tide round a rock - relentlessly. III Over land and sea haze, hiding distant mountains, shrouds a bleak future. Men, busy as ants, eyes fixed on the task at hand, ignore horizons. IV The bronze Buddha on the mountain sits massively. His sightless eyes are fixed on a far horizon. If the mist should clear his view would be of calm waters where ships ride at anchor and at rest. Believers and non-believers, pilgrims, stream, like termites towards honey, upwards, swarm briefly and unnoticed round his feet, then stream down again. What sweet plunder do they carry to the nest? Beyond the ships, what is it that he sees? What prospect holds that level gaze? Could he discern them through the haze? The slim towers of the city rise and, aspiring to a rival heaven, are blessed. It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well written, Winston! I enjoyed this very much! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
winston What brew simmers in the pot, Could it be the horizon? Enjoyed |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
A glimpse. Enjoyed and felt I was viewing it through your eyes. References to the ants and termites reminds me of dense population, but a determination to work and be productive. Interesting. Thank you, Pat ![]() ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
Thanks Denise, Seymour Tabin, regards2you - I appreciate your perceptiveness. It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency. |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (big huggssssssss) This is beautiful, sweet friend, this made me cry to see the towers stretch to the heavens and like an obelisk reflect the light of the golden sun! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Winston, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Winston, this is very well done. I enjoyed reading it. ![]() "Love makes the world go around" |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
hey, this is hot! the title is kind of strange, but that's okay!~ peace! i like the horizons, the vast scope of the poem. |
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Connel![]()
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
rrrrriiiiggghhht..... Hong kong eh? lol... Good poem.. thankyas for sharing. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
god, how i wish you mispeld sumthing, here! no such luk |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
Thanks MistleToe garysgirl GOIDsparkIESS - title is so because that's where I went on vacation in 1996. Connel - you sound surprised by something. What is it? inkedgoddess - my dear Brooklyn beauty, don't forget am only human, so, maybe, one of these days you might (just might ![]() ![]() Thanks. It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency. |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Very descriptive and thought provoking. Meditative, as the Buddha is. And like the Buddha, much ignored. That is, the Buddha as meditation and introspection. Enjoyed this. |
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Cpat Hair![]()
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
like this..the structure and the thought process lend a feel to it that adds to the scenes painted with your words.. good stuff...and I make typos all the time. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i'm only human i'm only human i'm only human i'm only human i'm only human ................was that the one you planted? |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
Thanks mirror man, Cpat Hair, inkedgoddess - in this concrete jungle, you can't plant trees, let alone anything else. ![]() JamesMichael. It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency. |
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