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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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there you go you swept away my heart again, like always ever so successfully and I stand here ruing my decision to take a look at you yet again I should have known: pictures should be pictures and memories should remain what they are meant to be the past shouldn’t be allowed to become the present and yesterdays don’t deserve to be todays again and it seems impossible for me to relive yesterdays as if nothing happened yet when I see you like I did today, my heart melts like wax of a burning candle the flame of which is too hot so hot it hurts like aching memories of you (rather of not being with you) oh! how they are evoked like fountains from hell leaving darkness after droplets of light leaving behind a drought after a light shower of rain and Roger Waters bleeds through the speakers of my radio with The Bravery Of Being Out of Range though I am sure he meant something else and you left me Comfortably Numb to lie Amused to Death thinking of the Pros and Cons of Hitch Hiking and maybe at the end it will all make Perfect Sense when the Happiest days of Our Lives would be darkened by the Eclipse and there will be laid Another Brick in the Wall then again, how I would Wish You Were Here --------------- all italics are titles of songs written by the great songwriter/poet Roger Waters (formerly from Pink Floyd)... so all credit is due to him... many thanks for coming by ... [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (12-18-2002 12:27 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
you just get better and better my friend... the voice you write in has changed a great deal from the first I read from you... it is as if the language itself is evolving to fit the complexity of your feelings and ideas.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, You get better and better, enjoyed. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Powerful, poignant, and image-laden in your distinct style. -MVS "AS ABOVE SO BELOW" |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
Enjoyed reading your poem, a very well thought out one i might add.. i like the end part alot.. very clever. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is wonderful, Sudhir. I love the poem and I also love the music. In fact, I love almost all music. Thank you....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
music is my second love...this write is incredible! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I have really been enjoying your writing and if English isn't your first language, I am even more impressed by your talent! warm hugs, EA |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
your poetry is thoughtfully done, and exquisitely REAL. |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
ZzzzZZZZzzzZ .. oh. the last three stanzas couldve served as masterpeices [only because pink floyd is awesome]. *** and a 1/2. [*****] chris. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sudhir Iyer - your writing is excellent, as all that I have read... BC |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Wow! A lot of strong feeling in this. I think, maybee this wasn't about you, but....Never mind...I enjoyed it, thats all. Never be normal! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 WOW!!! OH MY GOSH, YOU DID IT!!! You've done the Music Challenge here so wonderfully, I too love Pink Floyd and think Roger is one of the most versatile talented writers of his generation! (big hugggsssssss) You always amaze me with your responses, sweet friend, that's right, today should never echo yesterday, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ron, my friend, if it is so, so be it... I am glad you are enjoying it... thanks a lot for your complimentary thoughts... Seymour, Thank you so much... Vandana, so glad that you enjoyed... Mark, I thank you for your appreciative words ... EagleScorpion, many thanks... Ethel, Thank you too... passing shadows, thanks for the 'incredible' reply ... EA, thanks for your wonderful response, and actually English is not my first language, but a language that I learnt... I thank my teachers for that... GOlDsparklESS, thanks a lot... Chris, I don't know what you mean by the Zzzz ... but I will take the 3 and 1/2 stars anytime... thank you... I like Pink Floyd too... Bill, thank you so much... Wind, thanks a lot for your wow... Noah, thank you very much for your ever so kind responses .... Regards to all, sudhir |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir It is always great to read your poetry... your talent for writing of feeling, and heart, comes acorss loud and clear. Enjoyed, as always.  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Martie, Thanks a million...  Regards, Sudhir |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
most interesting |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you very much, Ruth... it's good to see you... regards, sudhir |
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