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Cardinal Suite (five of seven)
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Cardinal Suite (five of seven) |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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With every perceived success And every rumored happiness Enjoyed by others It gnaws Within every new pain In flesh or bone In heart or soul It claws And every time a tooth Cracks and crumbles Or a bit of life Is coughed up, thickly It burns But not so much That he would change Anything |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
With every perceived success And every rumored happiness Enjoyed by others It gnaws Within every new pain In flesh or bone In heart or soul It claws ======================= I read your others of this series late last night...am enjoying your creative perspective as well as your gift of succinct impact. A unique inspire you have taken on here, clever and well done poet sir. It's over long before her fall from grace, she's never been this far from safe. |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Just the itch that can be scratched without changing the shirt. Well done, sir. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Envy? Mixed with so many strains of the others, it cannot be easily described or contained as one "vice" in this poem. Wow, wranx. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Glad you see no need to change anything; no need to envy anyone else's pathway. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I wish I could write like YOU! I wish I had your patient understanding...I wish I had a shack! I wish I WERE a yeti! I wish...   loving this m'yeti...  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Agreed with K what more could I say, except for the yeti part |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
A magnificently executed poem that merits reading and rereading. Thanks. "am a tourist not a terrorist, don't shoot, cause we are all on a journey to God" Michak |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Ok, back to the series. I'm seeing these as a collection on an after hours coffee house wall. Karen, you really want a shack?? lol |
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