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Knowing You
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Knowing You |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Tall lushly treed, thick surround, shimmering stillness, ahead and behind, up narrowing mountain pass, twenty mile an hour curve, at forty-five, black on black, tire hugging asphalt, a dry road, safe run, knowing you ~are~ close. View drops on one side, and wall grows on the other with shiny, silvery green rock. Ahhhh, breath stuck, as sun dazzles it's grace. And, I mind squint, at the thought of you ~existing~ and I so near. I would ascend any height, go on any treacherous trip, just to know this rush. Will you meet me as the rock solid wall, a strong embrace, or, will I know a deep canyon fall? I'll not risk it at all, instead, I shall make you my vista, a view of nature so beauteous and fresh, as if new mountain snow crisp-clean, unspent, my warmth from within melting you, quenching my need. Hurry, I must knowing you ~exist~. . . . . ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wow!. A very descriptive verse of someone about to free fall into love. The anticipation in this makes the eye continue down the beutifully phrased page. Splendid! Liz |
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Eliza Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 58 |
Elizabeth said it best. A free fall is exactly what I experienced. You captured the moment. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Exhilarating ride Pat, thanks for the tour |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Patricia, I believe that is the true quality of love, to know you exist and make the best of it! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patricia, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Pat, I love the way you did this. Like the others said, it's like the reader is falling as they read down the page. But, it's not a scary fall, it's like floating......  "Love makes the world go around" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
drifting....great write! |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
romantic and captivating--enjoyed! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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secretlife Member
since 2002-07-30
Posts 359Grean Earth ,,, |
This is really enjoyed... I love it... Hugessss |
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Krystopher Morris Member
since 2002-11-11
Posts 130Ancient land called Chivalry |
Beautifully done, Thanks for sharing with us. Poetry is love and love is life. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Sometimes it's better to use a parachute and slow the fall down somewhat...but this is great |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I mind squint, at the thought of you ~existing~ and I so near. sigh. I can dream, can't I? I felt this one tighten in my chest... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Thanks to each of you for reading and replying. Serenity, thanks for that...really was my favorite, as well... Hugs and warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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