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Sandpiper
Senior Member

since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
land of flora and fauna

0 posted 2003-01-15 05:56 AM

it stalks with no shoes
and in passing
air does not move,
though in presence
cheeks grow angry red
spanked by cold(hot) wind
and lips freeze
in a perfect Oh!(Oh Baby!)

it speaks with fingers
stabbing center,
leaving a hole (leaving whole)
the most vital of organs--
cozy-wrapped
in death's(life's) shawl,
touched by the widow's hand
(thunderstruck)
on a straight line
to never(ever) after

and they all fall victim
to the invisible(inevitable) cause,
perpetuated
by an endless cycle
of a need to hate(love),
riding the fine line--

some,
read the headlines,
victims
found, mourned, and buried;

others,
keep reading the fairytale
hoping for a different ending

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2003-01-15 06:47 AM

True write, some never see that the fantasy is just that.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2003-01-15 06:53 AM

i liked the way this was written, but i have to read again after coffee; as it is two thoughts woven together coming at me at once,
i think tho that we can go both ways tho at times, i know i can

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-01-15 12:57 PM

Sandpiper! One of your best yet! Very well done!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2003-01-15 01:02 PM

fairy tale endings...

nicely done.. enjoyed this for both the structure and the thoughts...

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2003-01-15 01:15 PM

Sandpiper
Now that is a pipers tune, enjoyed.

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

6 posted 2003-01-15 02:20 PM

Sandpiper,

Loved the title and the ending...
many good lines, as well.

Enjoyed greatly.

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2003-01-15 11:49 PM

(big hugggsssssssss) There are so many devils among us all in disguise and love can sometimes not be too kind to so many of the innocent and dreaming! (sad sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sandpiper, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

8 posted 2003-01-16 12:41 PM

Great write and one of the greatest titles ever

GOlDsparklESS
Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 428
central nj

9 posted 2003-01-16 05:55 PM

full of hope- very neat writing. good stuff-this love.

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