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Open Poetry #24

After my overseas trip

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

0 posted 2003-01-12 01:15 AM

I staggered emotionally
as I took in the concrete roads
and modern shopping centres
and other traces of urbanisation,

the sentimentality
I thought I would feel
having being subtly vapourised
into nothingness,

leaving behind
a disturbing nonchalance

I'm a tourist in my homeland

Argh.

[This message has been edited by kaile (01-12-2003 01:18 AM).]

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

1 posted 2003-01-12 01:55 AM

Kaile,

I really like this, though it seems sad. As if you lost a love. Amazing we change, sometimes it sneaks up on us, and we can never be the same.

Enjoyed, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2003-01-12 02:16 AM

yes, I felt a brief sadness here and I understand how it goes.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2003-01-13 08:14 PM

I felt a hint of sadness also..
perhaps because of this line~~

leaving behind
a disturbing nonchalance

However much I liked it,
a fish out of water is not
a pleasant place to be!

enchantingvamp
Member

since 2002-12-21

Posts 214
Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas!

4 posted 2003-01-14 04:37 AM

enjoyed this read very much, write on!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2003-01-14 09:06 AM

it is difficult sometimes..to go back and realize the "norm" has changed for us.

enjoyed this and the read...

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

6 posted 2003-01-14 09:11 AM

Something we all have come to know. An excellent write.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

7 posted 2003-01-14 02:13 PM

I understand this feeling quite well. Welcome home, stranger.

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