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Deeper waters |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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Those deeper waters Chasing the reflection of the moon In that river that leads to destiny, Sapphire waters rise above my knees. Grasses rustle softly, The earth is sleeping, Breathing. Can you hear it? Can you melt rain? Puddles on the ground grew larger as I cried I reached out to you And you pulled away, My feet were cold, Bitter frost on the sand, Course grains met with a drop of mist, Something bolder, Something sweeter was born Never be normal! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very good piece of writing, Liz! |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
wooo yay liz, liz is backkkkkkkkkk! i'm liking these sapphire waters. lots of deep thinking in this one. full of questions, and answers i think. am i making sense today, i think not. well, i am in my head. i liked this friend, hope you're ok. you dont sound it, but then who is? lots of love to u, gem xxxxxxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ooooh Liz....very very nice! Much enjoyed! ~Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Thanks guys  Never be normal! |
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bluRaven Junior Member
since 2003-01-08
Posts 18Richmond, VA |
lovely poem and expression of emotion! "~Sometimes you have to forgive someone because you want them in your life."~~ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Liz, this is lovely, sweet friend, this made me cry as I believe love is most special when it mends a broken heart as I hope I can find this remedy soon! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Nice write my friend. I liked the images of the sand...time itself. Well done. ThisDiamond |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
This was a wonderful read.  |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Beautiful. "Can you melt rain?" Beautiful. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I love the way this one leaves the reader with a question and a nudge to ponder the different levels of meaning. Well done, Wind. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
deep and very good...I liked it! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Grasses rustle softly, The earth is sleeping, Breathing. Can you hear it? Can you melt rain? Very cool, enjoyed the chill in your Wind~ |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
very nice imagery Wind thanks |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hey little Liz  How ya doing? Good, I hope??  Hey, guess where I'm putting this one???? Yep, you got it...  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
your writing always makes me think--"can you melt rain?"--classic! Enjoyed! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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