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A homeless dude pushes his shopping cart
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A homeless dude pushes his shopping cart |
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A. L. Becker Member
since 2002-09-06
Posts 167San Francisco, California 
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A homeless dude pushes his shopping cart. He scrapes along, panhandling for a buck. His doglike face displays his rotten luck. By looks and taunts he'll 'vance his filthy art. My eyes ahead i'm trying to pretend i cannot see; i haven't what he wants. And walking on, and feigning nonchalance, From out his grasp my path i hope to wend. We're more alike, the dirty thief and i, Than either me or he are like to say. For while his street's a toilet, mine's an ashtray And neither will lift a finger to get him by. Except the Lord commands to each a task, A simple one: to give to all who ask. "Oh, do not ask, 'What is it?' Let us go and make our visit." -Eliot [This message has been edited by A. L. Becker (12-18-2002 07:18 PM).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
You know, in your critique you stated that you wanted to learn from the poets here, but to tell the truth, after reading this, I will truthfully say that there is much we can learn from you, my friend! This is a splendid write, and the thoughts here are touching to anyone who knows city life, and even if they don't. Bravo!! P.S. has anyone ever told you how much you resemble a much younger Goldie Hawn? And that is a compliment,as she's a fav of mine!!! Pen how you truly feel... it is a safety-valve for the soul! [This message has been edited by Sunnyone (12-17-2002 05:01 PM).] |
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Music Maker Member
since 2002-07-07
Posts 152THE ORIGINAL !!!! |
Firstly I would also like to add my agreement (For once!!) with my wife's comments about your similarity to Goldie Hawn. I assume that you mean that you throw your cigarette butts in the street, and not that you pee in an ashtray? Seriously though, what a perceptive and well thought out poetic observation - Well Done!! Pleeze (pretty please!) write more soon in this manner, I loved it. Seasonal Felicitations,to you and those that you love, from John Someone who thinks logically provides a nice contrast to the real world. |
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A. L. Becker Member
since 2002-09-06
Posts 167San Francisco, California |
dear Sunnyone and Music Maker, thank you so much for your thoughtful comments. i have a hard time with sonnets and i'm glad you liked my attempt. "Oh, do not ask, 'What is it?' |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
welp, I work security in a parking lot at WalMart, and we have some panhandlers now and then, and even though I would like to help, I can't. I even have to tell them to leave. But the people that I do get to help are worth the job. |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Compelling write--enjoyed! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Enjoyed this perspective and the form.. nicely done indeed. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Nice snapshot of the real world. I enjoyed the contrast, a glance at both sides of the street. |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
lol... Goodpoem.. Thanks for sharing. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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