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ivordavies
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since 2007-01-10
Posts 739
Chester, England

0 posted 2007-01-21 01:33 PM



Better Like it Hot

The devil went out walking,
to find more souls to win.
He didn’t seek the evil ones,
for they belonged to him.

He looked around to find himself,
a soul as white as snow.
To change the course that it had set,
then show it where to go.

He had some natural helpers,
and scattered them about.
A little envy and some greed,
suspicion, fear and doubt.

A lot of hatred, mingled with,
religion, that’s for sure,
The very things when caught by man,
would bring him to his door.

He never failed his mission,
when looking for new blood.
His bait was always taken,
by the ones who had been good.

For it only takes a moment,
to fall in the devil’s spell.
Then swap your place in heaven,
for the burning flames of hell.

So remember when you’re tempted,
by the things you have not got.
If you hurt someone to gain them,
then you’d better like it hot!

Ivor G Davies

The moment created this second, is a  moment that's going to last.
It lives the full spectrum of time, the future, the present and past.

© Copyright 2007 Ivor G Davies - All Rights Reserved
Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725
California
1 posted 2007-01-22 10:58 AM


I really enjoyed the way that your poem flowed and how you exemplified your delightful story telling ability here and I also thought that it contained a great message to boot.

Good job,
-Bob

Beatrice Boyle
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since 2006-12-06
Posts 438

2 posted 2007-01-23 04:14 AM


                  

Bea

ivordavies
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since 2007-01-10
Posts 739
Chester, England
3 posted 2007-01-23 04:51 PM


Bob, Bea,

Thanks for looking at this, I'm still finding my way around this site and have not really settled down to which forums are appropriate to post in.

I also miss the 'number of times viewed' flag you sometimes get on other sites that at least lets you know you are being read!

Anyhow, I am the guest so I will try to fit in with my hosts where possible...

Thanks again for 'finding' this....

Ivor

sandgrain
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA
4 posted 2007-01-26 10:32 AM


I love it!  You've put these truths together so well.  Seems quite often lately we've heard of "religious" or self-proclaimed Christians caught in some pretty dark hanky-panky.  We must all beware of being self-rightous for none are beyond temptation.

Thanks for sharing this here.

   Rae

ivordavies
Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739
Chester, England
5 posted 2007-01-26 06:24 PM


Rae,

Thanks for reading and commenting, this one can be a little uncomfortable for some, even me the writer!

Ivor

trutodaraiders
Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820
CA
6 posted 2007-01-28 10:29 AM


Ivor I must say that you are truly talented in your writings. And hopefully 1 day before your passing you put those words in a book to pass on to the coming generations. My stomach is sooooooooo sick of all the crappy poetry..Kinda reminds me of American Idol!!>? People think they are good, but are truly horrible. Your poetry helps sooth the belly.
ivordavies
Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739
Chester, England
7 posted 2007-01-28 11:18 AM


trutodaraiders

Firstly, thank you indeed for your support.  You are a braver man than I making those comments about some other poetry! (LOL)

I do feel,however, that beauty is in the eye of the beholder and truly I do not understand or enjoy some types of writing.  I would not however disregard this as crap (unless it is in rhyme which I do understand a little).

I actually feel quite guilty when  somebody who likes my work posts poetry I cannot understand.  There is free writing that carries my soul and I love not even noticing it is not in rhyme, alas there is free writing I do not understand which I know is good because better poets than me say so!

When I comment on such work, to me it has bridged that poetic barrier between free writing and rhyme to such an extent that it too becomes poetry.

In a very short space of time I seem to have connected with several people on this site,  I only came on this site because the only other site I post on went down for a few days
and Grandma Bea recommended you lot!

Thanks again for the welcome and continued support.

Ivor

Angel4aKing
Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
USA
8 posted 2007-02-04 01:50 AM


You have great gift of writing...this one makes you stop and think for sure..Take Care, J

~~~kingsangel~~~

ivordavies
Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739
Chester, England
9 posted 2007-02-11 03:47 AM


Kingsangel,

Thanks for popping by...

Ivor

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