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Rainy Day Voices
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Rainy Day Voices |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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I rose as if from a bed of mud, covered with a memory of rain - your hand warm and dry beneath mine. There were no yellow tulips so early in March so you held a bright new jonquil before you in the other. Closed eyes held the past for only a moment before it was lost to the present. It’s 7:00 AM and last night’s wind has brought Autumn's first rain, sweet and noisy. On the bedside radio a girl with a rainy day voice sings about love and tenderness- of being kind and generous. She probably meant it at the time. Rainy day voices have accents all their own, with a comeliness that surrounds us in comfort, collecting our secrets and keeping us warm, somehow always keeping time with the rain. The seasons have come to be my time keepers, each with its own way piling days into months. Today's rain is falling on dying mums, and my cold empty hands. We died long ago. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Jamie, Hello my friend, long time! I really enjoyed this poem from you, much depth and emotion...and always your heart shines straight through! beautiful writing! i've missed you. drop me an email when you get the time. take care. amy  "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Now I wish I had a rainy day voice, instead of the frog in my throat I get from rainy days. As always I like your work Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jamie To tell time by the seasons here, might mean it is summer all the time. It's been a long time since it rained, but perhaps today. Enjoyed your poem! |
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Tammy Blessing Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 366PA |
Enjoyed this poignant write. Tammy |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You've been missed here sir. The underlying sadness in this poem throbs like a heart beating in pain. I understand. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Jamie, I really like this. It's so beautiful, with it's memories...but so sad, with it's feelings of loss. You did an excellent job of showing both. Thanks for sharing. Love To All, Ethel |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jamie, You know that I love this. It's so sadly beautiful and wonderfully penned by you m'dear. On the bedside radio a girl with a rainy day voice sings about love and tenderness- of being kind and generous. She probably meant it at the time. She probably did m'friend Hugs Mmy |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thanks for the thoughts, as well as for taking the time to read and reply. JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Hey J - has been a while... you should stop that, you're too good a poet to keep these from 'us.' "She probably meant it at the time." Is perfect. It's the fullstop in between some smooth runs on the country highway. It jarred at the right moment, preparing properly for the next accelleration. Well done. C |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Jamie - I enjoyed reading this writing about rainy day voices. I really liked the words. Nice write... BC |
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Robert Adamson Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 328PA/USA |
Good poetic sense. I like it. Thank you. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Jamie, my heart goes out to you, I can feel your sadness in these words but know your loved ones you lost will never forget you and through the rain their velvet glove will tiouch your heart and caress you with a rainbow! (sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jamie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Very vivid images Jamie. This was very well written and I enjoyed it much. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Rainy day voices have accents all their own, with a comeliness that surrounds us in comfort, collecting our secrets and keeping us warm, somehow always keeping time with the rain." I know just what you mean.... keeping this |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I just realised that I hadn't added this to my library, so..... adding  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
... All I can say my dear is that your poetry has grown you know? Can you see that? Your tones...your thoughts..the way you put your words together... I'm sorry it took me so long to get here...useless ain't I? Sigh...well, you know how it is... This is a hush, this poem, quiet, solemn...and yeah, it's libraried now along with the rest of the 8,000 heh..  K |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Gee,, still growing ( and not just bigger around)-- at my age--lol influence of a southerly wind extended the growing season i guess JThere is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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