Open Poetry #23 |
Love's humiliation |
FuzzyFrazzledFraggle Member
since 2002-09-20
Posts 155Fraggle Rock |
Dear Broken Heart, I've come a long way Only to find myself again Slipping on silver tears Gripping onto vulnerable fears I gasp for sanity Through my sobs and Outspoken naivite I'm tired As you can tell By broken fantasies And throwing my hopes Down Love's wishing well I know I can not be like my sister; Cinderella And I know I can not be like my cousin; Gwynhefar I wonder why I am always the one Left with you; A broken heart Left throbbing in the middle of the night Leaving me with no sleep in sight And even better yet An unheathly contradictive appetite For Prince Charming's affection Yet instead I lie here with an infectious fever Burning through my veins Traumatizing my heart With fleeting thoughts Of pain mixed with optimism Perhaps even The Queen's Mirror was right Maybe my heart is masochistic Why else would I subject myself To Love's humiliation... Consider yourself fuzzed [This message has been edited by FuzzyFrazzledFraggle (10-23-2002 01:42 AM).] |
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~K Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 104 |
Why indeed... I should be in bed myself but had to say this is beautiful first, & also The mirror never lies (or so I've been told) |
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Robert Adamson Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 328PA/USA |
I like being frazzled. Thanks so much. etoodog |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
perhaps your heart is just something needing to be shared...and for that you will indeed suffer the indignities of trying to find love..the pain the hurt the humility it forces on you... very nicely done.... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
More dazzled than frazzled, enjoyed this piece alot, some wonderful lines. HUgs this a powerful and emotive read. "Slipping on silver tears Gripping onto vulnerable fears I gasp for sanity Through my sobs and Outspoken naivite" "I can not be like my sister; Cinderella And I know I can not be like my cousin; Gwynhefar I wonder why I am always the one Left with you; A broken heart Left throbbing in the middle of the night" "An unheathly contradictive appetite For Prince Charming's affection Yet instead I lie here with an infectious fever" The ladders of life that we scale merrily Move mysteriously around So that when you think you're climbing up, man In fact you're climbing down-Nick ca |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Now this way to well. I felt like this 3 times before Liam. Very well done. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
i know how you feel. it sucks. the poem is a bit trite i thought - but then i never was one to believe in children's tales. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear FFF ~ Oh, you write so well of the pain of a broken heart. You draw the reader into your shattered world to reveal the depths of of your misery---an intimacy shared between writer and reader. EA |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Wow! I so identify with the feelings in this piece! And the powerful imagery and the fairy tell metaphors fit your words perfectly! Well done! I especially love the lines: Burning through my veins Traumatizing my heart With fleeting thoughts Of pain mixed with optimism Perhaps even The Queen's Mirror was right Maybe my heart is masochistic Why else would I subject myself To Love's humiliation... I hope you find your Prince Charming soon still looking for Guenevere (lol) - Jeff "People say I should learn some self control; but I just want to exorcise my soul" |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I loved your heartfelt poem and Jeff's response too, as so often we keep in search of the "ideal". I guess with age you learn that has to change a bit, but I never hand out advise, life takes you there instead. Well done indeed and loved your metaphors in this poem. |
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FuzzyFrazzledFraggle Member
since 2002-09-20
Posts 155Fraggle Rock |
I never do this, make an apperance but thank you all for your gracious replies, *Hugs* means alot..trust me.. Consider yourself fuzzed |
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