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a small corner (white rose--noah challenge)
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a small corner (white rose--noah challenge) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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pins and needles on my skin-- it's raining information in this thunderstorm of mind there is no safe harbor found just relentless pounding rain each drop a bit of fire inside a child runs in circles frantic for some comfort ground now weary of such runaround collapsing in retreat I am still here-- hear me breathe? now search the shadows you will find me there a-tremble in concede of this small corner of my mind. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (10-22-2002 02:28 PM).] |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Wow! You literally blew my mind with this one. It's excellent. It's powerful. Man, your mind is filled woman, where do you find the place for the lovely words you write. I see now, tis why you write them out, there simply isn't room for them. This is grand. A challenge well met.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*smiling* at the reflection of you I see in every word. I too have wondered how you can hold so many words in that pretty head of yours then turn them into rhymes divine... and into mirrors     Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
*Bump* Cause I really, really like this.  |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
 what can I say...  read my mind hehe..obviously I like!Kristen If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
serenity~ Well, I am very glad that this got kicked back to the top. I love this. There is so much of 'you' in this, my friend.  Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
great stuff! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Challenge conquered. Wonderful work Karen! |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, you really met the challenge with this one. I'd like to tell you that I like the way you write. Your personality just oozes out in every word you write. I think it's really something the way you can accomplish this. Sometimes, I can't seem to get my feelings out on paper the way I'm actually feeling them inside. It seems the words just aren't adequate enough. You seem to accomplish what you're aiming for in every write of yours that I read. This is real talent, Karen. Thanks for sharing your personality with us. Love makes the world go 'round (unkown) |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Nice Poem.. Enjoyed. Thank you for sharing. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Oi... Too much life combined with too much depression is depressing. I almost cried. I loved the poem, but I think I'm done reading today. If I can stand to be away, that is. *whispered* Thank you... Kielo According to statistics, a man eats a prune every twenty seconds. I don't know who this fellw is, but I know where to find him. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I like the corners with streets, without walls. |
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