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still remains (answer to "florence" for H.)
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still remains (answer to "florence" for H.) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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He put it so close to my eyes that all I saw was blur. I took his hand and moved it back and then I saw it was brochure. A package tour of Europe-- fourteen nights and thirteen days. Then he just got angry-- he recognized my heart's dismay. Europe...oh my cherished dream. but not like THIS--no--not like...this. I understood he felt betrayed. I too, felt a Judas kiss. How could I explain to him that dreams cannot be bought on whim? I didn't want to go--he knew-- not with HIM--no...not with him. Too beautiful a dream of heart to trade it for a stand in line. I could not make him understand-- one does not quickly gulp fine wine. "You could ruin anything." I was thinking the same thing. But Paris must be seen, in love... and Europe still remains my dream. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (11-02-2002 05:06 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"You could ruin anything." He turned his back to me. But Paris must be seen, in love... and Europe still remains my dream." ============================================ Perfect Karen! Ooooh I love how you do this! ~Hugs YOU!~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing.~ |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is just so beautiful Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"Europe...oh my cherished dream. but not like THIS--no--not like...this. I understood he felt betrayed. I too, felt a Judas kiss."  (sigh) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, you always bring out the renaiisance in all of muse with your words, I LOVE IT!!! (big hugggssssss) This is precious and novel, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh man. Is this true? Geesh. What do we sacrifice for a dream? Do we take what's offered - the crumb of bread or wait for the whole perfect loaf. Well written missy! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thank you...so much... um... and grin to Sharon..you know my story, "IT'S FICTION"  (oh, and edited a line and typo's too..forgot to add the bitters )came back to add, that the answers to your other questions are in the first stanza--the first two lines are my metaphor... heart hugs to all, with thanks to H. for the inspiration of her beautiful poem. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (11-02-2002 05:16 PM).] |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Hey witch, A trip IS after all, only as good as your traveling companions, Eh? I'm sure Etoile will like this write. (I'll give her a little nudge in this direction.) ~Ed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
grinning Ed...thank you, and could not help but notice the "s" on companions...*chuckle* stay tuned folks, for "Serenity does Europe"  Ed! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
but not like this - no not like this. Doesn't that say it all? Excellent write. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
They seem to give us just what they want us to have. Not what we want. This is a beautiful poem. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, thanks for the explantions in the replies, otherwise, I would have probably made a long reply that was completely opposite of your meaning. I have a tendency to do that with the work of you talented poets. (well, here I go again....) Seriously, you write beautiful poetry and this was no exception. As with all your work, I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing. Love makes the world go 'round (unkown) with love and hugs from Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-03-2002 09:20 AM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
How could I explain to him that dreams cannot be bought on whim? I didn't want to go--he knew-- not with HIM--no...not with him. Too beautiful a dream of heart to trade it for a stand in line. I could not make him understand-- one does not quickly gulp fine wine. "You could ruin anything." I was thinking the same thing. But Paris must be seen, in love... and Europe still remains my dream. ===================================== ya know baby....Im thinking LIFE should be seen in love....just wondering what travel agent we call to book that...yadda yadda.... love the blunt edge of this girlie...your writing is always honest..even if it is fiction Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining. |
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reluctantlyme Junior Member
since 2002-10-28
Posts 34 |
But Paris must be seen, in love... ...or not at all. No matter how good looking she is... someone, somewhere is glad she's gone. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks again...this seemed to be one women in particular could relate to--although I do sometimes feel sorry for him at times... smiling at Smartchick's comment--for this is true, but when he asked me what I wanted for a wedding present? I said "a divorce." And you are right-  --I didn't get one! |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
"You could ruin anything." I was thinking the same thing. But Paris must be seen, in love... and Europe still remains my dream. These lines are so perfect. This is so Beautiful …you are very amazing...you write with such deep feelings. Believe me Serenity...France is a place that must be seen no matter what...maybe you could visit France and fall in love with a nice Frenchman??? Or a nice Jewish man *wink*. Well I just love this one...and I will read it many times and when I go back to Normandy I will think of this wonderful poem. Hugs H. [This message has been edited by WhileIWasGone (11-04-2002 10:09 PM).] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I love your writing. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Me too! Thanks squirrelbud for bringing this one back. PS Karen, you can hand over that vacation package anytime. (Can I pick my own travel partner?) |
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