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Upstairs, The Baby Awakes the Morning
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Upstairs, The Baby Awakes the Morning |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Upstairs the baby awakes the morning She has been sleeping with the doodads that hold her blanket up security in cold plastic she warms it with her fingers First a rustle of cotton stirs and the fragrance of sun dried lifts then settles She is me I hear her breath like wings dip and rise this piece of her still lives upstairs The light is on in the closet and just a crack in the door sends it across the braided rug to the foot of her bed Gone are the safety slats of crib Her walls are scribbled crayon and colors mark her territory bold fences and many circles try to keep her safe if I die before I wake The dust balls scurry into the dawn frizzled and alive with light driven air for a minute they pose before any movement sends them back to the hardwood floor under the bed Soon the curled fingers of innocence will be touched by sun coming through a small pinprick in the shade and the baby will awake the morning She is me I hear her breath like wings dip and rise this piece of her still lives upstairs |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Start the novel, Martie. For this is how Anne Rice got started... Here's the pen. I'll pass the paper. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
First a rustle of cotton stirs and the fragrance of sun dried lifts then settles ========================== The light is on in the closet and just a crack in the door sends it across the braided rug to the foot of her bed ========================== The dust balls scurry into the dawn frizzled and alive with light driven air for a minute they pose before any movement sends them back to the hardwood floor under the bed Soon the curled fingers of innocence will be touched by sun coming through a small pinprick in the shade and the baby will awake the morning ===================================== Martie, Martie, Martie ... my my my...what a muse the morning has always been in your pen... (recalling "silk lined")(among many others) you capture these "sun dried" moments like few can. and this verse..... She is me I hear her breath like wings dip and rise this piece of her still lives upstairs my my my ............. (IWIHWT)  just one line ... one rhyme ... one metered verse ... if only I could inspire in you ... promised poetic coerce. [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (12-09-2002 02:15 PM).] |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
 Oh I wish, I wish! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
how beautiful Martie! Nice imagery, great thoughts back to the days of past. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
beautiful.... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea---novels are so excruciatingly long. Thank you for the encouragement. Janet Marie--thank you always, for the you in your replies. Sharon--what a pretty graphic...I'm afraid my word program and keyboard are mine. Thank you for your wish though. passing shadows--thanks so much for reading. Sometimes you just need to look back to see what is still around. Ron---Thanks, my friend, for the beautiful! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Martie, this is so gorgeous, sweet friend, this made me cry as I love babies so much and children and just the thought of a mother holding her baby close and crying in joy made me cry too as they are Gods most beautiful creation! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is gorgeous, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, what a story you can write in poetry. You do this so well. I loved it, as I do all your work. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Martie...once again I shake my head, and smile, in awe of your talent as a writer. This is beautiful dear lady. ~Hugs~ ~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~ |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ethel--The story of the baby me, still around sometimes in morning..thanks. Nancy--Thank you for your always sweet replies! Hugs! |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Martie, I enjoyed the picture you painted of Samantha and yourself in this lovely piece.  *hugs*The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
what more can I say--beautiful words, beautiful feelings expressed! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Stunning, you've left me speechless, and teary-eyed. You are soooo good! Love and hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You are one who is so in touch with her own child-like wonder. I love to see the world through your eyes--and your pen. ~ hugs from the inner child in me to the inner child in you Linda |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Noah--Thank you so much for your reply! Michael--This is not about Samantha, but about me...I know how easily it could be confused. Thank you for reading. Sandpiper--Thank you for the lovey reply. Pat--Thank you, my friend. Linda--Thank you for understanding. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
If I could describe life as you do....I would be all that I ever have dreamed of being and more... Yes, you should write about this...even if only a book for your children and grands.. This is awesome work Martie dearest... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I'm speechless. Beautiful Martie. adding to my library Maree  |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry--thank you for one of the nicest comments ever. Maree--Thank you, for being such a good friend. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - this is so very precious, I'm glad I did have a chance to read it. It does say something about you... BC |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oh Martie, this is gorgeous. It is going into my library - thanyou sweet poetess. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Robert Adamson Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 328PA/USA |
This brought back a few baby memories. I thank you kindly. etoodog |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - a wonderful poem - thanks for taking us to one of those places where your spirit wafts sweet memories over us and as we see through your eyes and words we touch a part of us that wants to wake up the morning - just great - Paul |
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