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Possession (Senryu)
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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Immaterial Love is not our possession but our submission [This message has been edited by Aenimal (12-09-2002 02:07 PM).] |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
5-7-5 and has to deal with nature, not concept. Pick something physical, like a tree, and describe it physically. Leave any further thought up to the reader. Haiku is supposed to create an image that provokes thought without communicating any nonphysical thoughts. This is, however, a senryu.  And yes, the syllable count is right. Parasite |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Parasite thanks for clearing that up for me, I don't think I've written one since i was in gradeschool. Lol |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hi,.. I think this is a correct Senryu.... Haiku's are usually about Nature.. still the same format though. Enjoyed this Raphael Maree  |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Raph, I love this poem whether it's a senryu or a haiku.....  As you can tell by the ones I write, I'm just learning all the correct ways to write both these, so I just call them little "Japanese Verses"....  I know, though, that they are 5-7-5..... "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (12-09-2002 03:09 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
so true, so true |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This is rich in meaning--and quite clever! EA |
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