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World Travel |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
World Travel Stirring bones in the midst of the smouldering fire, the old woman looked up at me and cackled. Her lined face, lit by the yellow leaping flames, grimaced in savage delight. I think she was a gypsy, or possibly a bruja. I didn’t like the air in this musty cottage, something sour had died and decayed in the wall. I had thought I was looking for a taste of the real Mexico. It wasn’t arroz con pollo. The contrast between the proud, lordly mountain, with it’s bracing zephyrs, and this broken-down, smelly, valley village was ludicrous. She gabbled something in a voice that was so high and shaky, and accented, that I couldn’t make out the words. Muerta del something or other. Alma de what? Okay, I get it. The real Mexico doesn’t speak Spanish. I’m more a foreigner here than in LA. She stared up at me and winked one watery eye, then turned back to her fire. And stirred the bones. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW! I loved the imagery here, I pictured it all as I was reading. I saw the difference of LA and Mexico a few years back, not like you penned, but what a difference just crossing the border. You'd think two lands touching would be somewhat similar eh? A most excellent write. Maree  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Nan darling heart this is utterly utterly wonderful When I think you have reached the peak of perfection you then write something that is so perfect, so well written and so alive that I find my heart sighing wishfully, I know I couldn’t write this I wish I could . As always darling heart your writing is exceedingly good. You of course know I adore this don’t you? Mmmmm I do!   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
bravo! this one told with a wry bit of humor as well as an insight.... story telling at some of its best!!!! I tip my hat... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Dark Angel, thanks. I was going for a scene, enigmatic and somewhat dark, with a contrast not only of cultures, but of ideas about cultures. Marsha, how am I ever going to know when you like something? You have that English reserve, you know. So understated, always. Cpat-thanks! I'm a storyteller at heart. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interesting...try Paris...James |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
JamesMichael, Nobody liked me in Paris unless they were paid to, like the tour guides. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Ohhhh, you took me there--excellent!!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Wow! Great story-telling! Interesting juxtapositions! Enjoyed this reading experience! EA |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Sandpiper, thanks! I love to paint pictures with words. EA, thanks! I'm glad you saw the complexities I tried to convey. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Nan, you said in the comment that you "love to paint pictures with words", well you certainly did so here. I also felt like I was reading a story, too. Excellent writing, Lady.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Thanks, girl, that's exactly the response I wanted. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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