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Shades Of Me And You (workshop challenge)
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Shades Of Me And You (workshop challenge) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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Shades Of Me And You You want to paint the world in shades of blue but first you must see past the dark of night. Go forth and seek to find the light of day. You won’t because you fear the day’s new start. You need to try to give your life a chance. Do not step back into the dark of night. Allow the skies of blue to brighten life. I speak to you in tones of heart and soul. If you will listen closely you will hear. Your hand I hold in cherished bond of two. Let’s paint our world in shades of me and you. I know that you can 'read' me |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nice...and such a nice thought.. I enjoyed |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Let's paint our world in shades of me and you. =========================== I dont know what the challenge was... but I know I love that last line's intend!!Lovely heart on sleeve poetry Donna. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Donna, and you certainly painted a beautiful picture of words for my mind's eye to behold. Thank you, sweet friend.   "Love makes the world go around" |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
CPat, thanks much. I appreciate it. Janet, thanks much my mothy friend. The challenge in this months poetry workshop was Blank verse in Iambic Pentameter with no rhymes.  not easy.........Ethel your such a sweetie! Thanks much. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
with NO RHYME?????  I will pretend me mothy eyes didnt hear that one  lol |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Janet you already know that unless I'm in one of my ramble modes, I can't NOT write in rhyme. It's much easier to think in rhyme than it is in IAMBS. geez....  (sorry Deer, I had to say that....and thanks for your help!) |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Donna, it appears to me that you can write well in any style! I enjoyed this stretch of your poetic wings! ~ happy hugs! Linda |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Gentle Spirit Your hand I hold in cherished bond of two. Let’s paint our world in shades of me and you. Excellent couplet, enjoyed. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I want to thank you all for your kind responses. I would like to take a moment and offer my special thanks to Balladeer for letting me borrow from his knowledge and teaching me a very frustrating way to write in different verse than I am used to. For you DEER: For you my friend I send my thanks today. A lesson learned, a pal to show the way. I thank my friend for teaching me of verse in Iams, oh NO I would rather curse..... but teach he did, we had a special time oh Deer forgive, I had to make this rhyme~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is so touching, and with your golden heart of love you are bound to always bring blue skies to all your loved ones and so many more! (kiss on cheek) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I'm certainly glad I didn't miss this lovely piece, Donna. Penned beautifully, my friend. *hugs*The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Not for me this challenge, I have trouble with iams (except for the great I am) at the best of time, and then to not rhyme - I think me heart would stop. However, you did a wonderful job. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful....no way could I do this Donna! WOW!!! Wonderfully done! ~Hugs~ ~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You did fantastic, Donna! I just advised...the words, the idea and the construction is all yours and I salute your effort!  ps....thank you for the little poem...and THANK YOU for making it rhyme! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Donna, you did a marvelous job. With a bit of tutoring from the best, you could not help but succeed! Me? I'm going to go hide under a rock until December is over... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I want to thank you all very much. Deer Kari, no way!!  Trust me, Deer is good at kickin butt so you better get writing cuz I personally think between the two of us we can take you!!! Get writing lovely lady and hugs. Welcome back. |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
Donna this poem is so 'you'. Don't even think about asking me to try one of these, you already know the answer. |
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