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do not sing |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597
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It is cold when she is quiet The air is still Stars shine but do not sparkle Birds do not sing only squawk at one another My ears are so alone they ring in emptiness |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I was drawn to this because of your name and the title.. I know I will enjoy the read when I see your name.. and the title? ..it's what my kids always say to me when I start to sing too loudly. This is sad..hauntingly sad to me. But ever so wonderfully penned poet sir. ~Hugs~ ~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow, this speaks volumes,,,the last two lines really hit hard. Excellent...do you mind if I add it to my library? cheers Maree  |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Santa! Is that you?.....LOL....very interesting write Mr. Krawdad...Do you reside in the lower state of mind or upper?....I've visited both, many years ago...when my beard and hair was at least as long as yours......enjoyed the read... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
The stillness is deafening...it speaks louder than words screamed into one's ears or EMBLAZONED across a page. If you listened very carefully, you may hear the song that your heart is trying to sing. ~ Whispering willows are softly speaking of their love for you...May the sounds of nature keep you company and give you comfort. Earth Angel |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
E. Right you are, haunting. Curious, isn't it, how another can do that to you. Glad you enjoyed. D.A. Certainly, add it to your shelves, I'm flattered. And the last two lines? Well, I think I learned that from her, she does it so well. Toe. Lower state of late. And your beard? You cut it? Awww, too bad. Bet you looked good in it ! Thanks for stoppin' by. E.A. Thanks for your sweet response ! I'm smiling. And they do, they do. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
this seeps in my bones and it inspires a response to you..."recall" |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Krawdad~ Sometimes the silence can be deafening. I enjoyed this powerful piece. Well done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yes, Krawdad, this is a very powerful poem...so beautifully written, but so sad.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Felt the cold..heard the silence--so much emotion in a few, well written words--enjoyed!! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Krawdad....I didn't age as eloquently as you have....LOL....I really looked old...turned gray fairly young....maybe cuz of the lifestyle I led?....My beard wasn't as long as yours...but my hair was at least as long. Down here in Alabama in the late 60's early 70's you had to be a drug dopin hippie communist or something worse to have hair like I did.....and I swear, I wasn't a communist!!!! |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
_Lady Thank you. I enjoy a response in verse. v,g,& S Thank you. Glad you enjoyed. Toe Separated at birth? Found my first white hair when I was in highschool. Started this "shag" the day before I said goodby to Uncle Sam in the late 60's so I know all about the heavy hair prejudice, it was alive and well in the rural north too. Small world bit, I remember 'Bama, I was at Ft. McClellen for awhile. Oh, and this time of year I do get mistaken for someone else, by a certain age group. I try not to tease them, but enjoy it. Kraw |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I would think you could be mistaken for William Lee with the Oakridge Boys too?...I worked for the Allman Brothers band before I went to Vietnam....think that's where my gray came from... |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I'm appreciating the depth which resonates below the simple appearance of your style... hard to describe, but very cool... -MVS "AS ABOVE SO BELOW" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes.. Ia m with Mark here.. enjoying and not sure i can explain all that resonates with the style and the words. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Toe, Yup, I get that too, and questions about the Harley I must surely own (but don't). There have even been Walt Whitman comments (now THAT'S scary!). MVS & Cpat, Thanks guys, glad you enjoyed. Some call it laconic, which gives me pause, but I take no offense. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
You seem like a really nice guy, wish I knew ya....hope ya have a great holiday my friend.... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
My ears are so alone they ring in emptiness I swear this happens to me all the time...I even go and check the phone thinking someone is calling me...but... *s M |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Silent applause so as not to break the wonder, or the ache this left. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
This was the first poem that caught my eye on this page. Do not sing??? sounds like something my boss used to tell me when he thought I was having too much of a good time entertaining grocery shoppers where I was a cashier. This piece put a spike thru my heart. I know exactly the kind of silence to which you allude. I hope your vigil of silence ends soon. Love, Light and Peace, Sherry Cherish the good memories of the past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. But above all... be kind to yourself today. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Thanks again, Toe, and who knows, with the mega budget cut around here I might have a lot of time on my hands soon and will take the southern trip I've been promising myself. I'd be looking for poets for sure. M, Actually, mine do ring, but not to be mistaken for a phone. And hey, if you really need that phone to ring, I've got this cheap phone card . . . ;-) Thanks for stopping by. K, Thanks, and good to see you here. Hope you are doing ok. Sherry, Thanks for your comments. (Darn grumbly old boss!) |
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