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MARK V SHELDON
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0 posted 2002-12-04 04:12 PM


"SCALED"

Copyright 2002 by:MARK V SHELDON


Molted from your life
A second skin outgrown
Shed through twists and turns
Left behind with the dirt
And fragrant thorns
A hollow tunnel to the past
Where forked roads and tongues
Sequester slivered slithers of
Sense less self


"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

© Copyright 2002 Mark V Sheldon - All Rights Reserved
Magnus
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1 posted 2002-12-04 04:15 PM


I shed this same skin years ago....finding
that beneath it lied a softer covering,
yet very durable...  

Nicely done Mark...good message..

Ethan Halo
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2 posted 2002-12-04 04:46 PM


i shed daily...
great theme mark.

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

Enchantress
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3 posted 2002-12-04 04:56 PM


Here it is, my friend,
Another layer peeled ~
And so we go...
One step closer to the truth.  

~Hugs~

~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~

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4 posted 2002-12-04 06:02 PM


Where forked roads and tongues
Sequester slivered slithers of
Sense less self
seems we pass these places every day...

great write my friend... truly enjoyed

Aenimal
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5 posted 2002-12-04 06:10 PM


Love the metaphor. We've all shed skin and have many more before we're done. Cycle of life.
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6 posted 2002-12-04 06:13 PM




I enjoy the entire poem, but I especially like the last line:

"Sense  less  self"

Warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

The Lonely Stranger
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7 posted 2002-12-04 06:34 PM


And if we are like the lovely serpents, we come out of that old skin shinier and more beautiful than ever.

... and they sent him home happy ... one hundred percent.

MARK V SHELDON
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8 posted 2002-12-05 03:01 AM


Barry, nice interpretation though shedding can also be from having been burnt...

Ethan:  Make sure you still retain the core of you though...  Thanks for the read.

Nancy:  Onward, my Lady...

Ron, indeed we do.  Thank you for the kind words and understanding.

Raph, yes...  the unicycle of life which rides on in solo.  Thanks for stopping by.

Glad you enjoyed, Pat -- thank you.

The Lonely Stranger:  Yesssssss...  the "lovely" ssssssserpentsssssss...  And sometimes, we're they're skin, cast away...  Thanks for the stop-by.

-MVS

"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

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9 posted 2002-12-06 11:44 PM


I think this is grand...truly grand.  I'm new here but this one has already found a special place...somewhere.  Maybe I'll make a list now and put this one on it first!  I adore the comparison of a molten skin to past junk...LOVE this!  Excellent!

EP

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10 posted 2002-12-07 09:16 AM


Loved this metaphor!
Slither and slide
through life I glide
shedding old ways,
smoothing my path,
welcoming new twists
in the road.


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11 posted 2002-12-07 09:31 AM


enjoy
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12 posted 2002-12-07 02:09 PM




(sigh) Truth is but a whisper coming from the crystal core, and we must keep chiseling at each layer until we behold the grand luster in the center where the light is grand! (big huggssssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Mark, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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13 posted 2002-12-07 05:00 PM


Well crafted piece, enjoyed the metaphors chosen, and the flow of the piece.

Season's Greetings from Canada eh!

[This message has been edited by Mysteria (12-07-2002 05:01 PM).]

Kethry
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14 posted 2002-12-07 05:33 PM


shedding skin seems to be an occupational hazard for both lovers and liars and it seems you have incorporated both. Kudos to you.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



MARK V SHELDON
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15 posted 2002-12-07 10:22 PM


Elimeno P, you are too kind...  I am flattered and moved that this piece resonated with you and would make you want to top your list with it...  Thank you for sharing.

Kacy:  I prefer to walk...

Vandana:  I love your .

Noah:  Sometimes.  Other times it's a Depeche Mode concert with your ear scraping the grill of the front row speaker...

Mysteria -- how've you been?  Glad to read from you again!

Kethry:  It is...  no matter where one occupies themselves...  Thank you for the kudos -- much better than kudies...

-MVS

"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

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