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WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

0 posted 2002-12-02 11:40 PM

Riding the Moon

The night was clear and the stars shone bright,
The moon brighter still.
I looked up at that glorious full moon,
And for the first time I saw the tales it told.
Somehow there were shadows that played upon it,
Revealing secrets never told.
I saw some that were fictitious, some the tales of old,
Of knights in gleaming armor and maidens very bold.
Some of the night was spent in laughter,
Some in tears.
And as the sky turned to pink and orange
I looked up at that fading moon,
And I saw my very own tale, riding upon the moon.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

[This message has been edited by WinterWren (12-04-2002 05:52 PM).]

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

1 posted 2002-12-03 12:04 PM

When we face that ancient sphere our tales are indeed timeless. Why not? Enjoyed and chin up.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2002-12-03 06:40 AM

i liked it, yes,
you could see it in the moon, like in your lovers eyes,

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

3 posted 2002-12-03 07:31 AM

I love these sort of poems. This was great. You have a lot of talent Winterwren

Never be normal!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2002-12-03 10:31 AM

Hello Wren. Enjoyed the perspective.
May the moon's glow and your tale be warm.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-12-03 11:25 AM

(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is sooooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, and may you always ride on the moon with your love on the stars chariot ride to eternity! (kiss on cheek) This is precious, sweet friend, I don't believe I have ever read your work before here but I am already a fan, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Stephanie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

6 posted 2002-12-03 11:32 AM

Woah, I'm really liking what you're writing

One thing that I did notice was in this bit:
"The night was clear and the stars shone bright,
The moon brighter still."

I thought that it would flow a little better if you changed it to
"The moon was brighter still."
But that's just me and my obsessiveness over flow lol. I really truly enjoy what I've been reading from you, and I hope that you continue to post

No, on second thought, let's not go to Camelot.
~ Arthur (Monty Python Search for the Holy Grail)
I'm Rhondiforous!

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

7 posted 2002-12-03 11:37 AM

Stephanie, this is simply beautiful. I like the poem
and the thoughts behind it. I'm looking forward to reading
more of your poetry. Thanks for sharing with us.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2002-12-03 12:12 PM

Oh, this was a joy to read and to experience. I too, am a gazer, lover, and romanticizer of the moon. Thank you for this lovely poem!

~ May the moon's glow forever guide your way through days of night

Earth Angel

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

9 posted 2002-12-03 12:56 PM

WinterWren~
Welcome to Passions~

If it's about the moon ... I'm gonna love it~

Thank you for the nice replies you've dropped on a couple of mine ... I appreciate them~

I post most often now in the Corner Pub or in Spiritual ... but if you've ever a mind to do so ... you can find LOTS of my 'moonies' scattered in the Open Forum archives~

Again, I welcome you to the circle of friends and poets~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Salty
Senior Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 669
Texas

10 posted 2002-12-03 03:42 PM

such a mystical thing...THE MOON... Your words did it justice.

enjoyed the read!!

~Salty

[This message has been edited by Salty (12-03-2002 03:43 PM).]

Sunkissed
Senior Member

since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

11 posted 2002-12-03 05:24 PM

I had the feeling of being told fairy tales as a child at bedtime when I read this. Beautifully written.

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

12 posted 2002-12-03 08:03 PM

The pull of the moon's gravity inspired you well, Stephanie..I enjoyed this poem..

believe in what your heart feels...

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