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wranx
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since 2002-06-07

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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2002-11-22 05:36 AM

I had just been arraigned and released
On my own recognizance
Exactly the thing that got me
Into this pickle in the first place

With the standard stern warning
About not leaving town
Still sounding in my ears
I went home and packed

I grabbed a couple thousand bucks
A small caliber hide-out
And headed north, up Route 1 and 1a

Heading ostensibly back to my roots
A small village in Newfoundland

But, just north of Boston
I got kinda stuck
In a little place named The Hardcover

A heaven on Earth
A bar lined with bookshelves
And that played great Blues and Jazz

I stopped in for lunch
And stayed past Last Call

The Barmaid that evening
Impressed, I guess, with my stories
And my outlaw condition
Suggested I eschew a hotel

For a stay at her place
In order to continue
Our “In Depth” discussion
About nothing at all

After several meals at the bar
And three breakfasts with Becky
She proposed that I stay

“You could work at the bar”
“And you can live here”

But all that I heard was
“He followed me home”
“He’s so nice, can I keep him?”

I thought that it would be fine,
Until I chewed on her slippers
Or pooped on her rug

To be turned out like the cur
That I assuredly was

So, I left my sweet barmaid
For Bar Harbor Maine
And a date with a ferry

I had thinking to do

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2002-11-22 05:45 AM

I hear a slight whimper that breaks my heart.

ow...baby...

m'yeti sighed.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

2 posted 2002-11-22 06:05 AM

Ed sometimes leaving is hard, but staying.....even harder. Sometimes,
we gotta think. Well written.

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

3 posted 2002-11-22 07:29 AM

Ah adventure. And still working on your "own recognizance" no doubt. I understand.

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2002-11-22 07:36 AM

wranx
That path sounds familiar, enjoyed.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

5 posted 2002-11-22 07:55 AM

Ed, you tell a story well... and this one seems to be going somewhere when coupled with Whores.... I look forward to seeing what next finds its way to these pages.

good work, with a lot of good lines... I enjoyed

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

6 posted 2002-11-22 10:01 AM

You write the edge well...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

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7 posted 2002-11-22 10:47 AM

I belive "your own recognizance" will lead us down many more paths as you write the story...this begs for further chapters ...
perhaps the result of your "thinking to be done"?
very cool write poet sir...much cooler than
"bowling or decoupage."

I'm not crazy, I'm just a little unwell
I know right now you cant tell
but stay awhile, maybe then you'll see
a different side of me

MB20

Corinne
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

8 posted 2002-11-22 03:04 PM

Wranx,

you've been down some hard road. Writing is very therapudic, especially when the writing is honest. As this is.

Cor

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

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Ohio

9 posted 2002-11-22 03:14 PM

i wonder,
whats better: the illusion or the realthing?

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

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Moved from a shack to a barn

10 posted 2002-11-22 03:23 PM

Thanks all, for your comments on this slice of my history.

Inked one,
I have had an illusion or two,
but find fiction a difficult write.

Seems somehow......empty, yanno?

Thanks again.

Ed

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

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the ass-end of space

11 posted 2002-11-22 03:37 PM

You continually raise the bar wranx.

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

12 posted 2002-11-22 06:21 PM

The Barmaid that evening
Impressed, I guess, with my stories
And my outlaw condition
Suggested I eschew a hotel

For a stay at her place
In order to continue
Our “In Depth” discussion
About nothing at all

Yep, there's more to this story. Very cool write. And yeah, you're right about the poop on the rug thing. I peed on her insurance agent...ONCE, and I was history...lol.

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

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Ohio

13 posted 2002-11-22 10:12 PM

to be frank, ed,
the illusions make for sweeter dreams, dont they?????
marie

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

14 posted 2002-11-22 10:47 PM

Very captivating write...I hung on every word...let's hope there is more to tell.

...believe what your heart feels...

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

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usa

15 posted 2002-11-22 11:30 PM

On the Road

you dharma bum

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

16 posted 2002-11-22 11:46 PM

Yes, Ed..... I am waiting eagerly for the next installment!
A wonderful story, told as a true poet

~ loving rodent hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

quietlydying

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since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

17 posted 2002-11-23 05:24 PM

i haven't read a poem that told a story this well in a long time.

i wish there was a bar like that around here.

very nicely done. i enjoyed it muchly.

/jen/

i'm so bitterly disappointed. betty, i think it's time you leave now.

bsquirrel

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18 posted 2002-11-26 02:06 PM

Wranx,
Write a novel.

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

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Moved from a shack to a barn

19 posted 2002-11-26 03:06 PM

Thanks, everyone

and Mikey?

Whaddya call a novel...that isn't?

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