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A glow under ice
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A glow under ice |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Your eyes are burned towers losing their ruin, a glow under ice of fire and snow. They open dark windows latched tight as doorways, and suffer the silence -- and say "I don't know." They press shapes of letters into my back and leave my sides heaving, and leave off attack. Bring them quite slowly rising toward heaven, bring them to my eyes. Perhaps we'll grow. A glow under ice, a snowy white fire burning the flowers of underwater. Perhaps the power. Perhaps the streetposts. Perhaps I love you at least this discreet. Bring them quite slowly up to the window. Blink through the shatter. Together, let's go. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
There you go again, leaving me in awe of your brilliant words. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing write Mike! Much enjoyed the read. ~Hugs~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Excellent thought and crimson with fire...even under ice. ThisDiamond |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Very good. I enjoyed very much. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) No element of earth can ever suppress the flame! (big hugggssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, God Bless You, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
bravo mike! you keep writing them, I'll keep reading them and learning from you how to mix the play of word and image into a surreal reality |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
They press shapes of letters into my back and leave my sides heaving, and leave off attack. Bring them quite slowly rising toward heaven, bring them to my eyes. Perhaps we'll grow. A glow under ice, a snowy white fire burning the flowers of underwater. ================================= Bring them quite slowly up to the window. Blink through the shatter. Together, let's go. ================================ surreal, ethereal with a tortured angsty edge of ache...wrapped up in color and light and the solitude of night...tied up with a bow of your heart's intend....she inspires amazing things in your pen my friend. go...head for the snow...and the glow. I'm not crazy, I'm just a little unwell |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
michael...you are so talented...every time i read you...i feel like i can't breathe...helen |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
 Thank you all! |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
*sighing* here..  This is lovely and passionate..always passionate. ~~I Love You~~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
only you could see it and write it this way...awesome job! |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
Wow, I loved this! "burning the flowers of underwater." Wonderful imagery. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
"A glow under ice, a snowy white fire burning the flowers of underwater." Yanno? you really have to stop this. You could end up turning into, like, a poet or something. Damn! squirrel dude. Ed |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
It came to me 15 minutes before I left work for home. Thanks, everyone.Mike |
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