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Jamie Dawg
Junior Member

since 2000-03-25

Posts 35

0 posted 2002-11-23 04:29 PM

Urban sloth

'treble trouble
for dickydouble'
the urban language of highstreet kings.
the lords of the corner,
survey their minions
while the tinny radio sings.

they balance on the kerb
and intimidate their elders.
like junk food,
their days pass, momentary pleasure
all too easily wasted and forgotten.

)by the way 'treble trouble to the dicky double' is a line from an urban garage music group here in the uk....hope that didn't confuse too many people!

[This message has been edited by Jamie Dawg (11-23-2002 06:19 PM).]

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2002-11-23 05:41 PM

a good poem, telling the truth, but I think you mean curb..but of course I am not positive

M

Jamie Dawg
Junior Member

since 2000-03-25

Posts 35

2 posted 2002-11-23 06:16 PM

thanks for the comment, i appreciate i haven't a lot of posts...and i know that can put people off....basically i've been quite ill for the last year and haven't given netpoets the contribution it deserves.
oh and i'm from the united kingdom so it is spelt kerb here...lol...i had to check a dictionary tho.
thanks tho!

Jamie x

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

3 posted 2002-11-23 07:21 PM

ha! so it is.

that's awesome.

and you're always welcome here jamie.

/jen/

i'm so bitterly disappointed. betty, i think it's time you leave now.

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

4 posted 2002-11-23 07:30 PM

yay! a fellow english man. although i'm not a man. ha ha. which song is that from, i don't recognise it?
i like your style.i too enjoyed your truthful read.
make sure you come back and carry on posting, there are so many wonderful, supportive people who contribute here.
lots of love, gemma xxxxxxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-11-23 07:36 PM

(smiles) Oh Jamie, I love this, sweet friend, I too have never heard of that garage band lyric but this is sooooooo wonderfully cohesive, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jamie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (11-23-2002 07:36 PM).]

Jamie Dawg
Junior Member

since 2000-03-25

Posts 35

6 posted 2002-11-24 02:20 PM

thankyou everybody for your wonderful comments...from now on i'm gonna be here more frequently...and not just because your all being nice to me lol! gemjop...it is a pretty obscure reference from a local garage band called 'the max', but i included it because its sheer absurdity appealed to me...!

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