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Quantum Poet
New Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 6

0 posted 2002-10-15 03:56 PM

My heart, why do you dream incessantly?
Searching down limitless boulevards of pain,
For reasons to believe again.

This inescapable world, my billet has been.
Interminably watching these transient scenes,
Lurking within a weary instant.

Haunted by visions of failure,
Hunted by despair's faithful hounds,
In the thousand places I hide.

I rise to a dim daybreak,
Endeavoring to rid myself
Of this momentous burden.

Burden of pain, endlessly burning.
Burden of infamy, endlessly smoldering,
Burden of breathing, a judgment from above.

Despair and rage intertwine,
Shattering tenuous bonds that bind me
To a mind, long resigned to fading.

I cannot,

No more shall I face the sun,
It's acidic rays fill me with ache,
No more, never more.

No more my heart,
You have inhaled your last,
Find yourself a veil to shroud your cradle.

No more my heart,
You have said your last, sung your requiem.
Find yourself a tomb, to dream.

No more my heart,
It ends, and thus I lay me down.
Finally to hope.

No more!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-10-15 04:08 PM

(big hugggsssssss) I can feel such sadness in your words, sweet friend, I hope you really don't feel this way now and now you make quantum leaps to the light! (sigh) This is poignant, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

2 posted 2002-10-15 04:10 PM

Awesome poem. I could feel your pain

Cold hands means a warm heart

Hearts_Dance
Junior Member

since 2002-09-30

Posts 31

3 posted 2002-10-16 12:45 PM

So very sad that ones heart feels this much pain and agony. I pray that your Heart will be able to soon Dance again!

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

4 posted 2002-10-16 12:49 PM

the metaphors are really cool. i especially like "veiled cradle".

sad but not very sad, the emotion is a bit bland.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2002-10-16 01:58 AM

I think your poem is well written, though sad. I hope you aren't feeling this way, now. Thanks for sharing.

With Love To All,
Ethel....garysgirl

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

6 posted 2002-10-16 01:50 PM

This is a very sad write. I hope your heart finds happiness soon.

Dawn

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2002-10-16 01:58 PM

RMW
Your palette of umber suits the mood. Enjoyed the read of write.

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

8 posted 2002-10-16 01:59 PM

I too wish for you the return of happiness, soon. A very touching write.

[This message has been edited by WhiteRose (10-16-2002 02:00 PM).]

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