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jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

0 posted 2002-11-19 01:02 PM

Cross the horizon hilltop skipping
freedom bound...I have searched
and there is no longer a me
that I can see;

neither am I among the trees
sauntering without a care, admiring
as each leafed creation tumbles down
its vibrant colors denying death.

Since I have chosen nowhere
to go in the cars driving to and fro
there is not a me, I have looked
so I should know.

Softly touching your face
just before lips would touch in a kiss
desperately I look in your eyes
but regrettably I find there is not a me.

I breathe, I know that I must.
My hand on my chest proves me alive,
but I have succumbed, betrayed myself,
and I have left; there is not a me
inside.

[This message has been edited by jellybeans (11-19-2002 03:40 PM).]

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2002-11-19 01:09 PM

obviously there is a you... you wrote a part of it here...

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2002-11-19 01:41 PM

jellybeans - sometimes I feel like I have lost myself. Your words really touched me to-day. Well done. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2002-11-19 01:50 PM

What a wonderful, poignant write! It's so good I may forgive you for not giving me a preview... someday. *G*

I love the scenes you've created here... but yanno what? *S* I can tell you right where you are... you're in my heart. *S*

TwoHeartsOnePen
Member

since 2002-06-07

Posts 60
state of determination

4 posted 2002-11-19 02:02 PM

beautiful...
I haven't read your work in a while, and its nice to have you back.

Love is patient, indeed. It endures the distance when it seems we cannot endure it ourselves.

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

5 posted 2002-11-19 02:12 PM

Very familiar sentiments, Jellybeans...
but there really is a you, and you are an excellent poet

~ loving chipmunk hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

6 posted 2002-11-19 02:33 PM

Losing one's self is most disquieting...I love how you used external forces to reference existence...but it has to come from within...a search well worth making...very profound write!!

...believe what your heart feels...

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

7 posted 2002-11-19 02:41 PM

Cpat…..yes, I guess…but it is what is missing that is disquieting, sigh

Chris, thank you, have had this feeling for some time, but it hadn’t gotten to paper til now

suthern, lol, well lady as little as I write these days, I figured I better post as soon as it was finished so it wouldn’t be jinxed…and yep lady, that anchor in your heart, is a strong part of what keeps me going

two hearts…thank you, I don’t guess I have seen your name, but thank you for the comments…..have been working so hard that exhaustion takes my muse to silence..sigh

Thank you madame…..very sweet of you to say

scorpio, thank you…..and yes, I guess it is a search, I hadn’t quite come around to that thought yet…..thank you

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