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May I Have This Dance?
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May I Have This Dance? |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever 
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No.. Not this life for us, my friend, Not this time around. This world we're in's a lil' screwed up, and its got me feeling down. I finally got it earlier today, It brought tears to my eyes. The moment I realized, we're lovers in disguise. No.. We cant do what we came here for, cuz someone screwed it up, But know I love you anyway, and for now thats enough. Next time around we'll try again. Next time, our souls unfurl.. I call next dance, my darling, and it's my turn to be the girl!! No.. I'm sitting out this dance, my friend, I must sit here and rest. This world of death and hatred puts me strongly to the test. Not this time around, my friend, I feel I cant romance. What with the things we live among, I must sit out this dance. I have sent you nothing but angels, and I have placed nothing but miracles before you. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Eagle Scorpion... Your words go very deep. This carries alot of inner meaning.Enjoyed...Paul |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
What with the things we live among, I must sit out this dance. ================================= it does weigh us down and take away the joy sometimes....this reminds me of a friend who wont have any children...says she wont bring them into such a world of uncertainty... (shes adopted several older children) But know I love you anyway, and for now thats enough. but see..even when it seems to be too much... you found the hope and the reason to go on. Wisdom in your words Poet sir  No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
EagleScorpion Well done, I enjoyed both you posts. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Great piece of work here... but given the chance... I would rather not miss the dance. ~Hugs~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~ |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I am not sure which I like most, this poem, or your critique box..... Both are outstanding, I would say. Thank you so much for sharing your talent with us. I enjoyed this a great deal. Wise and understandable. Warm Regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
Paul - Yes.. indeed there is deep meaning here, isnt there? I'm glad you liked. Janet- I feel that I share your friend's sympathies regarding having children. If I'm going to have children, I'm gonna teach em right, and not let the idiots feed his/her head with the myths and nightmares that I had to endure. Yes.. I see the undying caring for another as a very strong positive spiritual reincforcement now.. not just a savage need to procreate. Maybe.. just maybe I could do it.. the thought of my own child brings me much joy. This world needs to change first, though. Seymour - Thank you sir! I look forward to reading some more of YOUR mastery in the near future. Cheers. Regards2You - Hehe.. that critique box needs to be changed.. thats been there for over a year now.. But hey we all love a little contructive criticism... you now what? I'm changing it right now! Thank you for reading. Thank you all and much love upon you. see u soon ;-) |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
Spiritual. The first time I read this, I cried... This life can feel, sadly, in a state of distraught. But- I don't think God ignores us Just truly KNOW... One day the dreams WILL come. This is so sad. But I can't deny that I haven't felt these feelings before...O, why do we have so much hope? Why are the most tender truths felt which such flickering inconsistency, overwhelming emotion, rareness, and COMPLETE BEAUTY???????! Life is hate-filled, vulgar, and corrosive. It causes me so much melancholy. Just the pain of knowing that its not supposed to be like this; we can all create such a grand reality, if we let it. if only there wasn't so much fear, if only we could live with peaceful wisdom and serenity, if only there weren't so many bizarre and completely artificial parameters keeping us from expressing who we really are! there are a billion reasons from keeping us from being free. the illusion of choice...vanquishes to frail illusions chosen... i suppose we have the choice to be free. but never wholly. never that. truth, love, and joy.. God bless you... even if you decide to sit this one out.. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
EagleScorpion, you are a very good poet, Sir. I've enjoyed both your poems today, too. I hope to read more of your work. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. "Love makes the world go around" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Joseph, while it is indeed so hard to live in a world of corruption, love is worth fighting for, so get up and join that dance and celebrate what remains true! (sigh) I send angel hugs of strength your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Joseph, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (11-18-2002 11:53 PM).] |
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