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The Daybreak Came Forth........(#7----"Japanese Verses")
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The Daybreak Came Forth........(#7----"Japanese Verses") |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA 
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We were there all night With sun rising o'er water The daybreak came forth [This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-21-2002 06:08 PM).] |
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Sybil Member
since 2002-09-12
Posts 73Midwest |
Rays of gold slipped in breaking the fast of one night Lo, the kiss still holds |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sybil...I loved your reply. I really enjoy reading the replys of everyone here. thanks for reading my little verse. "Love makes the world go around" |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
Just remember.Two lines of descriptive imagery and a line of reflection. paladin |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Paladin, thanks so much for telling me that. I'm going to write it down, so I can remember next time I try to write one of these. "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-21-2002 12:18 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay!!! Oh Ethel, this is sooooooo gorgeous, I love watching the sun come up and I dream of seeing it every morning by the ocean when I get to move there! (kiss on cheek) Yay, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ethel, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
nice *s M |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Noah.... Thanks, dear friend. I hope that you do get to live by the ocean one day, or at least close to the Gulf Of Mexico. The water is so nice to live by and, as you know, I love the beaches we have here in Florida. Maureen... Thank you sweet friend. I really appreciate you reading and replying to my little verse. I love to read your poetry. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
It was a great poem  Never be normal! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Liz, thank you. Hey, where have you been??? I've missed you a lot. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lovely in its simplicity! I love Haiku. They're very difficult to write. Cor |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Corrine, thanks for reading and replying. I love these, too, but I haven't got them quite right, yet, I don't think. I know that a haiku is about nature, has 5-7-5 syllables, one line of reflection and two lines of descriptive imagery...and a few other pointers I've been told here. But, I need more practice, I think. I sure do like them, though. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
you put all the practice you need in this little beauty garysgirl, wether we call it haiku or senryu, it still is a good piece. Keep them coming and I'll keep enjoying. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you so much, Titia, for reading and for your really sweet reply. I appreciate it so much. I sure do enjoy your poetry and your pictures, too. I'm glad, too, that your Mom is doing better. "Love makes the world go around" |
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