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ccvulture Junior Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 16 |
IN DOWNPOUR Sticky saliva sands mouth. (Gag.) Push out tight tongue. (Drink drops.) Nature’s licquor collides flying. (It cools.) Rainfall drowns (yesterday’s tears). God the Painter uses water colour. (Grey-green.) Gulls yell impatient like bankers. (Their turns come.) Tide restocks life to Old Great Ocean. (Fish will wave.) “Hello, (I’m for the taking!)” Ceaseless squirrels race escape. (Gates open.) She whirls the rainbow in a clearing. (She dances.) Take pictures of a mermaid inland. (She dances.) It is the way (she dances). God the Choreographer plans her movement. (He works hard.) Like jazz bass throb clouds. (I ride in time.) Outside time is Earth the orchestra. (I follow others.) The planets play (pianos and marbles). |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"God the Choreographer plans her movement. (He works hard.) Like jazz bass throb clouds. (I ride in time.) Outside time is Earth the orchestra. (I follow others.) The planets play (pianos and marbles)."   BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is fabulous, sweet friend, I love your wonderfully unique style here of letting the imagery stand alone and the obvious in parantheses, this is a fabulous debut that springs with life, God is the ultimate choreographer and stage designer of life, I LOVE IT!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (11-07-2002 08:19 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ccvulture Enjoyed the innovation. Will watch for your posts. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Welcome to Passions! Much enjoyed your first post! I look forward to seeing more of your work. Please check your email for a special greeting. ~Hugs & Smiles Nancy~ [This message has been edited by Enchantress (11-07-2002 09:32 AM).] |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
 ...believe what your heart feels... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to PIP. A pleasure to read your unique style and very talented portrait painted bright and vivid. Excited to see more. ThisDiamond |
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ccvulture Junior Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 16 |
Thanx for all your welcomings... looks like I might be spending a fair bit of time on here!!! CU later CCV |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome. Yes, please do spend some time in here. I enjoyed your style, and will watch for more. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow, this is really cool! I'm not one for in depth critique, please forgive. I love this piece and will be looking for more! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
God! I love this format and style! Awesome work! |
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